旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời chung ổn nhưng cần tự nhiên hơn và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp, rút gọn trùng lặp. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, sau đó cung cấp một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể; tránh từ không chính xác (ví dụ: “on chill and relax”, “during the train”) và dùng liên từ phù hợp để làm mạch văn trôi chảy. Hãy sửa ngữ pháp (travelling → traveling/! British spelling ok), dùng “helps me relax” thay vì “help me on chill and relax”, và thay “hold the memory forever” bằng “keep the memory”.

範例: Yes, I often look out the window when I travel by bus or car because the scenery is calming. For example, watching fields and trees helps me relax after a busy week, and I try to remember little details of the landscape to keep the memory.

建議: Ý hay nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp và trùng lặp ý (print → scrapbook → keep memory). Cần dùng cấu trúc tự nhiên, chia động từ đúng (take photos), sửa trật tự danh từ (car window), và dùng liên từ hợp lý để nối ý. Thêm một chi tiết cụ thể về cách bạn lưu giữ ảnh sẽ làm câu thuyết phục hơn.

範例: Yes, I often take photos of the view from the car window. I usually print the best shots and add them to a scrapbook, so I can look back at those memories later.

建議: Câu trả lời cần ngắn gọn, tránh lặp từ và sửa ngữ pháp. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (“I prefer the mountains”), sau đó giải thích với một hoặc hai lý do cụ thể. Sửa “when I trekking” → “when I go trekking” hoặc “when I trek”, tránh lặp “I can relax and I can relax”. Dùng liên từ như “because” hoặc “as” để kết nối ý và cung cấp ví dụ ngắn.

範例: I prefer the mountains because trekking there lets me explore nature and escape the city. For example, hiking through forests helps me feel refreshed and reduces stress.

× It can help me on chill and relax during the train and furthermore, I want to hold the memory forever.

✓ It can help me to chill and relax during the train journey and, furthermore, I want to keep the memory forever.

Incorrect use of prepositions and verb forms: 'help me on chill and relax' is ungrammatical. Use 'help me to' + base verb or 'help me' + base verb. 'during the train' should be 'during the train journey' or 'on the train'. 'hold the memory' is odd; use 'keep the memory'. Suggestion: use 'help me to chill and relax during the train journey' or 'help me relax on the train' and 'keep the memory'.

× Oh absolutely, I love to see the landscape outside the window car, so I often take photo of them to print them and then I will make a scrapbook and make my own photos collections.

✓ Oh absolutely, I love to see the landscape outside the car window, so I often take photos of it to print and then I make a scrapbook to create my own photo collection.

Multiple issues: word order and noun forms. 'window car' should be 'car window' (noun order). 'take photo' should be plural 'take photos' and 'of them' is unclear; use 'of it' or 'of them' consistently. 'will make' mismatches habitual action—use present 'make'. 'photos collections' should be 'photo collection' (singular) or 'photo collections'. Suggestion: 'take photos of it', 'print them', 'make a scrapbook', or 'create my own photo collection'.

× By this way I can hold it in my mind forever.

✓ In this way I can keep it in my mind forever.

'By this way' is incorrect phrase; use 'in this way'. 'hold it in my mind' is non-idiomatic; use 'keep it in my mind'. Suggestion: 'In this way I can keep it in my mind forever.'

× I would say that I prefer the mountains because when I trekking I can explore new things from nature and I can relax and I can relax away from the city that's make me feel so fresh.

✓ I would say that I prefer the mountains because when I trek I can explore new things in nature and relax away from the city, which makes me feel refreshed.

Verb form and agreement errors: 'when I trekking' should be 'when I trek' or 'when I'm trekking'. 'explore new things from nature' is better as 'in nature'. Repetition 'I can relax and I can relax' redundant. 'that's make me feel so fresh' has subject-verb agreement and word choice problems; use 'which makes me feel refreshed'. Suggestion: choose 'when I trek' for simple present habit or 'when I'm trekking' for continuous activity; avoid repetition and ensure subject-verb agreement.