旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and use natural phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitations and repetition, and add one specific detail using a linking word. For example, say why you enjoy looking out (relaxation, noticing details) and give a brief specific example.

範例: Yes, I usually look out the window when I travel by bus or car because I find it relaxing and it helps me notice small details of a place. For example, last month I watched a row of old houses and a colourful market as we drove through the town, which was very interesting.

建議: Improve grammar and coherence: avoid repeating the same ideas, correct tense and article use, and link ideas smoothly. Provide one brief specific example of what you photograph and when you avoid taking photos (e.g. when driving fast).

範例: Yes, I often take photos of scenery from the car window because I want to remember interesting places. For instance, I recently photographed a riverside park and an old bridge while we stopped at a viewpoint, but I only take pictures when it is safe to do so.

建議: Give a direct answer, avoid long hesitations, and correct unclear vocabulary (e.g. 'Seymour' seems wrong). If you have never been to either, say so clearly, then express a preference and give specific reasons using linking words. Keep it to 1–3 sentences.

範例: I've never visited the mountains or the sea, but if I had to choose, I would prefer the sea because of the fresh breeze and the relaxing sound of waves. I imagine walking along the shore would feel calming and different from city life.

× Because I love beautiful sceneries, I always try to catch beautiful, uh, views when I'm traveling either by car or bus.

✓ Because I love beautiful scenery, I always try to catch beautiful views when I'm traveling either by car or by bus.

'Scenery' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized as 'sceneries'. Also, parallel structure with 'by car or by bus' is clearer; removing filler words (uh) improves fluency.

× As I said, I love catching beautiful sights whenever I'm traveling. Even the local places there is a beautiful places I haven't watched. I take my phone out and I take picture all of them.

✓ As I said, I love catching beautiful sights whenever I'm traveling. Even in the local places there are beautiful places I haven't seen. I take my phone out and take pictures of them.

There are several issues: 'there is' should agree with plural 'places' so use 'there are' (There be issue). 'A beautiful places' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove the article. 'I haven't watched' is incorrect verb choice for seeing places; use 'seen' (past participle). 'I take picture all of them' needs plural 'pictures' and the preposition 'of' to indicate object. Suggestions: ensure subject-verb agreement, correct article use, choose appropriate verb (see/seen), and use plural nouns and prepositions correctly.

× Umm, that's a bit tricky question because I have never been to umm, neither sea nor mountains, but I think I like uh, Seymour because if it's umm, fresh breeze and unique scent and.

✓ Umm, that's a bit tricky question because I have never been to either the sea or the mountains, but I think I would like the sea because it has fresh breezes and a unique scent.

Multiple errors: 'neither sea nor mountains' should be 'either the sea or the mountains' with the article 'the' for general natural features (Article errors and Incorrect conjunction use). 'I have never been to either' fits the correlative pair. 'I like Seymour' seems incorrect—likely 'the sea'; corrected accordingly. 'Because if it's umm, fresh breeze and unique scent and.' is incomplete and uses wrong clause 'if' and singular/plural mismatches. Use 'because it has fresh breezes and a unique scent' to complete the thought. Suggestions: use correct correlative conjunctions (either...or), include definite articles for general places, avoid filler 'uhm', and finish clauses with a clear verb.