旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct articles and word order, and add one specific detail using a linking word. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel because I enjoy watching the changing landscape. For example, I like seeing small villages and rice terraces pass by, which helps me relax during long journeys.

建議: Fix tense and word choice, avoid filler words, and use linking words to show reason. Make one clear reason and one brief example. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I often take photos from the car because they help me remember places I visited. For instance, I photograph unusual rooftops or street markets so I can look back at those memories later.

建議: Open with a direct answer, correct singular/plural and article errors, and add a specific detail or personal experience to support your preference. Use a linking word like 'because' and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I prefer the mountains because I grew up in Nepal surrounded by peaks, so I feel at home there. For example, I enjoy hiking to viewpoint ridges where I can see the whole valley and clear snow-capped summits.

× I do take a lot of photos when I go to traveling and after the traveling, when I see the photo, I get so nostalgic and it uh, keeps the memory phrase of the travel.

✓ I do take a lot of photos when I travel, and after the trip, when I see the photos, I get so nostalgic and they keep the memories of the trip.

Incorrect use of the gerund after 'go to' and awkward noun choices. Use 'travel' (verb) not 'go to traveling'. 'Trip' is more natural than 'traveling' as a noun here. 'Photo' should be plural to match 'a lot of photos', and 'keeps the memory phrase' is incorrect; use 'keep the memories'. This preserves present tense habit ('do take') and corrects noun/verb forms.

× And that is one of the main reason that I do took the photo while traveling and it's one of my hobby also.

✓ And that is one of the main reasons that I took photos while traveling, and it is one of my hobbies as well.

The sentence mixes present 'do' with past 'took'. Use past 'took' alone or present 'take'. Here 'that is one of the main reasons' supports past 'took'. Also pluralize 'reason' to 'reasons' and 'hobby' to 'hobbies'. Fix article/structure for natural phrasing.

× I always wanted a window seat because I love sitting in window seat.

✓ I always want a window seat because I love sitting in a window seat.

Wrong tense and missing article. 'Always wanted' suggests past habit; context implies general preference so use present 'want' or keep past consistently. Also 'window seat' needs the indefinite article 'a'.

× Yeah, I do look out of the window because the when I look out of the window, the view is so mesmerizing and I love the view.

✓ Yes, I do look out of the window because when I look out, the view is so mesmerizing and I love it.

Remove extraneous 'the' and avoid repetition. 'Do look out' is acceptable for emphasis; simplify 'when I look out of the window' to 'when I look out'. Replace second 'the view' with 'it' to avoid redundancy.

× The mountains of the Nepals are very beautiful and it's very mesmerizing to see the mountains.

✓ The mountains of Nepal are very beautiful and it is very mesmerizing to see them.

Country names don't take plural 'the Nepals'. Use singular 'Nepal'. Also refer back with pronoun 'them' to avoid repeating 'mountains'.

× It's so obvious that I do prefer mountain because I grew up in Nepal and in Nepal the mountains are very popular and it is the one of the main reason that Nepal is famous in worldwide.

✓ It's obvious that I prefer the mountains because I grew up in Nepal, and the mountains there are very famous; they are one of the main reasons Nepal is known worldwide.

'Prefer mountain' needs plural 'the mountains'. 'It is the one of the main reason' should be 'one of the main reasons'. 'Famous in worldwide' is incorrect word order; use 'known worldwide' or 'famous worldwide'. This corrects quantifiers and articles.

× So I do prefer mountains.

✓ So I prefer mountains.

The auxiliary 'do' is unnecessary unless for emphasis; simple present 'prefer' is the normal form to express general preference. Removing 'do' makes it more natural.

× And after the traveling, when I see the photo, I get so nostalgic and it uh, keeps the memory phrase of the travel.

✓ After the trip, when I see the photos, I get so nostalgic and they keep the memories of the trip.

Pronoun 'it' incorrectly refers to plural 'photos' — use 'they'. 'Memory phrase' is not idiomatic; use 'memories'. Also ensure consistent plural forms for 'photos' and 'memories'.

× the view is so mesmerizing and I love the view.

✓ the view is so mesmerizing and I love it.

Repeating 'the view' is stylistically weak; replace the second noun with pronoun 'it'. Also avoid overuse of 'so' unless for emphasis; it's acceptable but concise phrasing is preferable.

× It's so obvious that I do prefer mountain because I grew up in Nepal and in Nepal the mountains are very popular and it is the one of the main reason that Nepal is famous in worldwide.

✓ It's obvious that I prefer the mountains because I grew up in Nepal, and the mountains there are very popular; this is one of the main reasons Nepal is famous worldwide.

Added definite article 'the' before 'mountains' and changed 'the one of the main reason' to 'one of the main reasons'. Fixed 'in worldwide' to 'worldwide'. Clarified structure for natural expression.