旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail. Use linking words and correct prepositions (e.g. 'look out of', 'when I travel by bus'). Avoid repetition.

範例: Yes. I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus because I enjoy seeing natural landscapes. For example, on long journeys I like watching fields and hills pass by, which helps me relax.

建議: Use one clear sentence to answer, then add a specific example. Correct verb forms and word order (e.g. 'I sometimes take photos' not 'I do make I make'). Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I sometimes take photos of the scenery outside the window because I like capturing interesting views. For example, when I sit by the window on a road trip I often photograph mountain ridges or rivers to remember the trip.

建議: Give a direct preference sentence then support with one specific reason and an example. Correct grammar (e.g. 'I prefer the mountains') and improve cohesion by using linking words such as 'because' and 'for example'. Avoid repeating phrases.

範例: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy hiking and the fresh air. For example, I often travel with friends to places like Kashmir, Manali and Shimla to go trekking and relax in quiet mountain scenery.

× Yes, I look at out the window because I like nature and when I went to do travelling in bus and that time I prefer to see nature in outside the window.

✓ Yes, I look out of the window because I like nature, and when I travelled by bus I preferred to see the scenery outside the window.

Problems: incorrect preposition order 'at out' should be 'out of' (ID 11), missing articles 'in bus' should be 'by bus' and 'the scenery' needs article (ID 17), tense and sentence structure 'when I went to do travelling' is awkward and incorrect — use 'when I travelled' (ID 6 and 26), subject-verb agreement and word order issues (ID 27). Suggestion: use correct preposition 'out of', use 'by bus' to indicate means of travel, include 'the' with countable noun 'scenery' or use 'scenery' alone as uncountable, and simplify verb phrase to 'when I travelled by bus'.

× Yes I take the photo but sometime I do make I make snap and when I sit in the in the window side and that time I feel good because the I seen an easily nature and nature view so that I like it so much.

✓ Yes, I take photos, and sometimes I take snaps. When I sit by the window I feel good because I can easily see the natural scenery, so I like it very much.

Problems: article and plurality 'take the photo' should be 'take photos' for typical action (ID 22 and 1), incorrect adverb 'sometime' -> 'sometimes' (ID 13), awkward phrase 'do make I make snap' is ungrammatical — simplify to 'take snaps' (ID 26), preposition 'in the window side' -> 'by the window' (ID 11), verb form 'seen' incorrectly used instead of 'can see' (ID 9/6), 'easily nature' wrong word order and adjective use — 'natural scenery' (ID 13). Suggestion: use plural 'photos/snaps', use correct adverbs, simplify and correct verb forms, and place prepositions correctly.

× I prefer to mountain because like the mountain most and mostly I do traveling with friends in Kashmir and in Kashmir there are lot of mountains so that like it so much and mostly I visit in mountain places like Kashmir and Menali, Shimla so that like most mountain places.

✓ I prefer the mountains because I like them most. I often travel with friends to Kashmir, which has many mountains, so I like it very much. I usually visit mountain places such as Kashmir, Manali and Shimla.

Problems: 'prefer to mountain' incorrect—use 'prefer the mountains' (ID 17 and 1), missing object pronoun 'them' after 'like' (ID 12), 'do traveling' should be 'travel' or 'am traveling' depending on tense (ID 6/26), preposition 'in Kashmir' when speaking of visiting should be 'to Kashmir' or 'in Kashmir' can be used but consistency needed (ID 11), 'there are lot of mountains' needs article 'a lot of' or 'many' (ID 14/22), place name 'Menali' misspelled — should be 'Manali' (word choice). Suggestion: use plural 'mountains' and plural pronoun 'them', use 'travel to' for trips, use 'many' or 'a lot of', and list place names correctly.