旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your answer more concise, use correct verb tenses and natural phrases, and add one specific detail. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a reason and one example. Avoid repetition (e.g. 'used to' repeated) and correct collocations ('mist of the wind' → 'mist' or 'windy mist').

範例: Yes. I usually look out of the window when I travel, especially in hill stations, because the views are beautiful. For example, last year I watched mist rising over terraced fields and felt relaxed while taking pictures.

建議: Use present simple for habitual actions, avoid vague words like 'random' and 'scenario', and be specific about what you photograph and why. Keep it under five sentences and use linking words (for example, because, so) to improve coherence.

範例: Yes, I often photograph interesting places I see from the car because I like to remember them. For instance, I take pictures of colourful shops or old buildings so I can compare them when I visit similar towns later.

建議: Give a direct preference sentence, then two clear reasons linked with words like 'because' and 'for example'. Avoid filler words and incorrect comparisons ('prefer rather than the sea to the mountain'). Use precise vocabulary ('mountains' not 'mountain has a hill').

範例: I prefer the mountains to the sea because the air is cooler and the landscape is peaceful. For example, I enjoy picking fresh fruit in mountain orchards and hiking on quiet trails.

× Actually, most of the time I used to look out of the window because the scenery will look so wonderful, especially in the hill station.

✓ Actually, most of the time I used to look out of the window because the scenery looked so wonderful, especially at hill stations.

The student mixes past habitual 'used to' with future 'will' and present forms. When describing past habitual actions, use past tense consistently: 'used to look' with 'looked'. Also replace 'in the hill station' with 'at hill stations' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: Maintain consistent past tense when using 'used to' and use plural or general locative preposition 'at' for places.

× I used to open the window a lot of the time to see the scenery and in the hills, the mist of the wind will be the incredible and it will be amazing to see on that.

✓ I used to open the window a lot of the time to see the scenery, and in the hills the mist carried by the wind was incredible and amazing to see.

Multiple issues: tense inconsistency (use past 'was' with 'used to') and incorrect prepositional phrase 'mist of the wind' and awkward 'to see on that'. Use 'carried by the wind' or 'in the wind', and 'was incredible'. Suggestion: Keep past tense with 'used to' and choose natural prepositions for movement ('carried by') and avoid redundant phrases.

× Most of the time I used to take photos when I used to see the scenario outside of the car window 'cause when I see a random place or a shop I used to take a portrait of it and I keep it as a memory when I used to go another places and see similar to that and it's good to keep a memory of it on the place.

✓ Most of the time I used to take photos when I saw the scene outside the car window, because when I saw an interesting place or a shop I would take a picture of it and keep it as a memory when I visited other places and saw similar ones.

The sentence overuses 'used to' and mixes present tense 'see' with past habitual context. Use past simple or 'would' for habitual past actions ('used to' or 'would' + base verb). Also replace 'scenario' with 'scene', 'portrait' with 'picture', and correct plural and article errors ('another places' -> 'other places'). Suggestion: Use 'used to' or 'would' consistently for past habits and choose correct nouns and plurals.

× Most of the time I used to take photos when I used to see the scenario outside of the car window 'cause when I see a random place or a shop I used to take a portrait of it and I keep it as a memory when I used to go another places and see similar to that and it's good to keep a memory of it on the place.

✓ Most of the time I used to take photos when I saw the scene outside the car window, because when I saw an interesting place or a shop I would take a picture of it and keep it as a memory when I visited other places and saw similar ones.

Errors: 'another places' is plural so should be 'other places'; 'a random place or a shop' is fine but later 'see similar to that' should be 'saw similar ones'. Suggestion: Match singular/plural forms and use 'one/ones' for replacing nouns.

× ... 'cause when I see a random place or a shop I used to take a portrait of it and I keep it as a memory ...

✓ ... because when I saw an interesting place or a shop I would take a picture of it and keep it as a memory ...

Mixes present tense 'see' and present 'keep' with past habitual 'used to'. For past habits, change present verbs to past ('saw', 'kept') or use 'would' + base verb. Also 'portrait' is not the usual word for photographing places; use 'picture' or 'photo'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent and use appropriate vocabulary for photos.

× Actually both the difficult to answer, but I would prefer rather than the sea to the mountain because mountain has a hill and it's a cold place to stay and it will be very chill and you can get fruit, uh fresh fruit and you could eat at the taste of the freshness.

✓ Actually both are difficult to choose between, but I would prefer the mountains to the sea because the mountains have hills and are cold, and you can get fresh fruit that tastes very fresh.

Problems: missing verb 'are' after 'both', wrong comparative phrasing 'prefer rather than the sea to the mountain', singular/plural mismatches ('mountain has a hill' -> 'mountains have hills'), awkward expressions 'it will be very chill' and 'eat at the taste of the freshness'. Suggestion: Use 'prefer X to Y', ensure subject-verb agreement, keep consistent plural forms for general statements, and use natural adjectives ('cold', 'fresh').

× So I would recommend to go on the mountains.

✓ So I would recommend going to the mountains.

'Recommend to go' is incorrect; use 'recommend going' or 'recommend that you go'. Also use 'to the mountains' (not 'on the mountains'). Suggestion: Use correct verb patterns after 'recommend' and use 'to' with places: 'go to the mountains'.