旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 注意時態一致性及語法結構，避免冗長和不必要的重複。可以用一到兩個句子作主題句，接著用一兩個支持細節，用連接詞使語句連貫。例如，將“when I was traveling”改為“when I travel”，並把“changing scenery coming, watch landscapes and city lights pass by”合併為更自然的表達。

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or train because it helps me relax. I enjoy watching changing scenery and city lights pass by, which makes the journey more interesting and the time go faster.

建議: 注意名詞複數和冠詞使用（例如 a photo / photos），以及時態一致性。另外可以更具體說明拍照的目的或方式，並用連接詞讓描述更有條理。保持句子數量在五句以內。

範例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery when I travel by train or bus. I especially enjoy photographing landscapes and city lights because they create beautiful scenes I want to remember, and sometimes I edit the pictures later to keep the best ones.

建議: 改善語法（例如“it's give me”應為“it gives me”），避免使用不自然的詞如“upstairs”來形容山上。可以先直接回答偏好，再用一兩個具體理由支持，使用連接詞使句子通順。

範例: I prefer the mountains because hiking gives me a strong sense of achievement. I also enjoy the clear blue skies and fresh air on the trails, which help me relax and feel energized.

× Yes, I usually look out of the window when I was traveling by bus or train because it's helped me relax and unwind.

✓ Yes, I usually look out of the window when I am traveling by bus or train because it helps me relax and unwind.

句子在时间表达上不一致。主句使用 usually 表示习惯，应使用现在时；从句用 when 引导的时间从句也应使用现在进行时或一般现在时，因此将 was traveling 改为 am traveling。此外 it’s helped 使用了现在完成时，与习惯性陈述不匹配，改为一般现在时 helps。建议：描述习惯或常态时使用一般现在时或现在进行时（for current actions）。

× I find the changing scenery coming, watch landscapes and city lights pass by makes the journey more interesting and helps the time go faster.

✓ I find the changing scenery, watching landscapes and city lights pass by, makes the journey more interesting and helps the time go faster.

原句在并列动词和动名词结构上混乱。find 后面接宾语从句或宾语补足语时，若用动名词应保持一致性：the changing scenery, watching ... pass by, makes... 这样整个主语成分统一，谓语用第三人称单数 makes。建议：把并列的动作改为同一种形式（此处用动名词短语）并保证主谓一致。

× Yes, I often take photo of the scenery outside the window when I was traveling on train or bus.

✓ Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the window when I am traveling on a train or bus.

句子时间不一致：often 表示经常发生，应使用一般现在时而不是过去时 was traveling，且名词复数与冠词错误：photo 应为 photos（复数）或加不定冠词 a photo；on train 前需加冠词 a train 或 the train，通常说 when I am traveling on a train or bus。建议：描述习惯用一般现在时，注意可数名词复数或冠词的使用。

× I especially enjoy photographing the landscape and city lights passing by because they create beautiful living scenes that I like to remember.

✓ I especially enjoy photographing the landscapes and city lights passing by because they create beautiful scenes that I like to remember.

主要问题是名词复数与搭配以及形容词使用：landscape 在此处更自然用复数 landscapes，且 living scenes 表达不太地道，改成 beautiful scenes 更合适。句子时态本身为现在进行/习惯，保持一般现在时即可。建议：注意可数名词单复数以及搭配更自然的形容词短语。

× I prefer mountains, I enjoy the process of hiking because it's give me a strong sense of achievement and I love the blue sky and fresh air upstairs.

✓ I prefer the mountains. I enjoy the process of hiking because it gives me a strong sense of achievement, and I love the blue sky and fresh air up on the mountains.

此句存在多处问题：1) prefer 后通常接定冠词 the 或直接说 I prefer mountains，但更自然是 I prefer the mountains；2) it's give 是主语-谓语不一致，it gives（第三人称单数）；3) upstairs 用法错误，表地点应使用 up on the mountains 或 in the mountains。建议：注意主谓一致（gives），名词和介词短语的正确搭配以表达地点。