旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: คำแนะนำ: คำตอบค่อนข้างเป็นธรรมชาติ แต่มีข้อผิดพลาดด้านไวยากรณ์และการใช้คำบางจุด ควรเริ่มด้วยประโยคหัวข้อชัดเจน จากนั้นเสริมรายละเอียดด้วยลิงก์คำเชื่อมอย่าง “because” หรือ “so” เพื่อให้ออกมาเป็นธรรมชาติและกระชับ หลีกเลี่ยงคำซ้ำและแก้รูปคำให้ถูกต้อง (เช่น “different town” → “different towns” หรือ “a different town”). นอกจากนี้ควรจำกัดความยาวไม่เกิน 4–5 ประโยคและใช้คำศัพท์ที่แม่นยำกว่า

範例: Yes. I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching the changing scenery. Watching the landscape helps me relax, and it often brings back memories of special moments in different towns. I especially like doing this when I’m travelling with someone important to me.

建議: คำแนะนำ: ประโยคมีความหมายชัดเจนแต่มีข้อผิดพลาดด้านการใช้คำและไวยากรณ์หลายจุด เช่น “take photo” → “take photos”, “car rental” ใช้ไม่เหมาะสม ควรเป็น “car” หรือ “vehicle”, “storage is limit” → “storage is limited”, “wash the scenery” ควรเป็น “watch the scenery”. ควรเชื่อมประโยคด้วยคำเชื่อม เช่น “because” และเพิ่มตัวอย่างหรือเหตุผลสั้นๆ เพื่อเสริมความน่าเชื่อถือ

範例: No, I don’t usually take photos of the view from a car because my phone camera isn’t very good and its storage is limited. Besides, I prefer to watch the scenery with my own eyes and keep the memories in my mind.

建議: คำแนะนำ: คำตอบตรงประเด็นและมีเหตุผล แต่มีข้อผิดพลาดไวยากรณ์และการใช้รูปคำ (เช่น “with is surround by mountain” → “which is surrounded by mountains”, “visiting the seaside feel” → “visiting the seaside feels”). ควรเริ่มด้วยประโยคหัวข้อให้ชัดเจนแล้วใช้หนึ่งหรือสองประโยคเสริมที่มีคำเชื่อม เช่น “because” และยกตัวอย่างสั้นๆ เพื่อเพิ่มความเฉพาะเจาะจง

範例: I prefer the sea. I grew up in Chiang Mai, which is surrounded by mountains, so I rarely see the ocean. Visiting the seaside feels relaxing and offers a different atmosphere and scenery compared to what I’m used to.

× It's helped me relax and I often remember special moments from different town, especially when I'm with someone important to me.

✓ It has helped me relax and I often remember special moments from different towns, especially when I'm with someone important to me.

Use of contraction 'It's helped' is ambiguous; 'It has helped' (or 'It's helped' = it has helped) is acceptable but better to be explicit. More importantly, 'different town' is incorrect because 'town' needs plural 'towns' when referring to more than one; this is a singular/plural noun error. Corrected to 'different towns' and 'has helped' clarifies the present perfect usage indicating an effect up to now. Suggestion: use 'has helped' or 'it's helped' consistently and make nouns agree in number. Note: This correction addresses verb in past participle usage and singular/plural noun agreement.

× I don't usually take photo of the view from a car rental because my phone camera isn't very good and its storage is limit.

✓ I don't usually take photos of the view from a rental car because my phone camera isn't very good and its storage is limited.

'photo' should be plural 'photos' when speaking in general. 'car rental' is more naturally 'rental car'. 'its storage is limit' is incorrect: 'limit' is a noun; the adjective form 'limited' is required. Also 'its' correctly refers to 'phone'. Suggestion: use plural for countable nouns when speaking generally and use correct adjective forms for state descriptions.

× Beside, I prefer to wash the scenery with my own eye and keep the memory of the trip.

✓ Besides, I prefer to take in the scenery with my own eyes and keep the memory of the trip.

'Beside' is wrong; use 'Besides' meaning 'in addition'. 'wash the scenery with my own eye' is incorrect idiom and singular/plural: the correct idiom is 'take in the scenery' or 'enjoy the scenery', and 'eyes' should be plural. Suggestion: use natural collocations and correct prepositions/transition words: 'Besides' and 'take in the scenery with my own eyes'. Note: This also touches collocation and plural noun use.

× Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching the changing scenery.

✓ Yes, I usually look out the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching the changing scenery.

Both 'look out of the window' and 'look out the window' are used, but 'look out the window' is more natural in this context. Removing 'of' improves fluency. Suggestion: prefer 'look out the window' in spoken English.

× My hometown is Chiang Mai with is surround by mountain so I rarely see the sea.

✓ My hometown is Chiang Mai, which is surrounded by mountains so I rarely see the sea.

Several issues: 'with is surround' contains incorrect verb form and word order; 'which is surrounded by' is the correct relative clause with passive voice. 'mountain' should be plural 'mountains' because multiple mountains surround the area. Suggestion: use passive 'is surrounded by' and pluralize general nouns when appropriate.

× I prefer the sea because visiting the seaside feel relaxing and give me a different atmosphere and scenery from what I'm used to.

✓ I prefer the sea because visiting the seaside feels relaxing and gives me a different atmosphere and scenery from what I'm used to.

Subject-verb agreement in present tense: 'visiting the seaside' is a singular gerund phrase, so verbs must be singular: 'feels' and 'gives'. Use 'gives me' instead of 'give me'. Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with singular gerund subjects.