旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Speak more fluently and naturally: reduce hesitations (uh) and avoid redundant phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Use correct collocations (look out of the window, scenery) and limit to 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. For example, last week I went on a road trip with my parents and a couple of close friends, and I spent most of the journey watching the countryside. Because the views were peaceful, I found it relaxing and enjoyed pointing out interesting sights to my friends.

建議: Be concise and relevant: avoid generalizations and informal expressions (e.g. 'bring charm on their faces'). Give one clear reason and a specific example. Use correct nouns (take photos, scenery) and linking words to structure your answer.

範例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the window because I like to keep memories of special trips. For instance, on our last road trip I took many pictures of the mountains and open fields to share with my family afterwards.

建議: Make a direct choice and support it with specific reasons. Avoid vague or incorrect phrases (e.g. 'cool bridges' unclear). Use linking words (because, so) and keep the answer to 2–3 sentences with accurate grammar and collocations (go to the mountains, enjoy with family).

範例: I prefer the mountains because they offer a calm atmosphere and cooler air, which helps me relax. For example, last year I went on a mountain road trip with my parents and we enjoyed quiet walks and stunning views together.

× Yes, I usually uh, lookout to the windows at the scenes when travelling by bus or a car.

✓ Yes, I usually look out of the windows at the scenery when travelling by bus or car.

The original uses 'lookout' (a noun) instead of the verb phrase 'look out', and 'to the windows' is incorrect preposition; use 'out of the windows'. 'Scenes' is plural noun meaning different scenes; 'scenery' is the uncountable noun for landscape viewed through a window. Also omit the article before 'car' when used generically. Suggestion: use 'look out of the windows at the scenery'.

× For example, last week I went on a road trip with my parents or with my few close friends.

✓ For example, last week I went on a road trip with my parents and a few close friends.

'Or' is incorrect in this context; use 'and' to list people who accompanied the speaker. 'My few close friends' is ungrammatical; use 'a few close friends' with the indefinite article. Suggestion: use 'and a few close friends' to indicate both groups accompanied the speaker.

× I enjoyed the scenery, uh, uh, before the window and I love the scene, uh, so I usually do it.

✓ I enjoyed the scenery outside the window and I love the view, so I usually do it.

'Before the window' is an incorrect phrase for location; use 'outside the window'. Repetition of filler 'uh' removed. 'Scene' is better as 'view' or 'scenery'. 'Usually do it' is acceptable but specify 'look out' if desired. Suggestion: say 'I enjoyed the scenery outside the window and I love the view, so I usually look out.'

× Yes, uh, I would love to take the pictures of the scenery outside the car window because nowadays people are no more camera shy and they love to record everything for the memorable memories in the future and to bring charm on their faces.

✓ Yes, I love taking pictures of the scenery outside the car window because nowadays people are not camera shy and they like to record memories for the future and to capture happy expressions.

'Would love to take the pictures' is acceptable but present habit is better expressed with 'love taking pictures'. 'Are no more camera shy' is incorrect negative formation; use 'are not camera shy' or 'are no longer camera shy'. 'Memorable memories' is redundant; use 'memories'. 'Bring charm on their faces' is unnatural; use 'capture happy expressions' or 'show joy on their faces'. Suggestion: simplify and use natural collocations like 'love taking pictures' and 'record memories'.

× For example, uh, when we went on our last road trip, we clicked a lot of pictures of the sceneries, for example, mountains and fields.

✓ For example, when we went on our last road trip, we took a lot of pictures of the scenery, such as mountains and fields.

'Sceneries' is rarely used; 'scenery' is an uncountable noun. Use 'took' instead of 'clicked' in formal speech; 'clicked' is Indian English informal. 'Such as' is a clearer phrase than repeating 'for example'. Suggestion: use 'took a lot of pictures of the scenery, such as mountains and fields'.

× Well, I would like to go on mountains or the sea also, but if I have to go in one place, I would always prefer the mountains because it has the calm environment and the cool bridges that I can feel.

✓ Well, I would like to go to the mountains or the sea, but if I had to choose one place, I would always prefer the mountains because they have a calm atmosphere and cool breezes that I can feel.

Use 'go to the mountains' and 'the sea' with preposition 'to'. 'If I have to go in one place' is awkward; use conditional 'if I had to choose one place'. 'It has' disagrees with plural 'mountains'; use 'they have' (subject-verb agreement). 'Calm environment' is acceptable but 'calm atmosphere' is more natural. 'Cool bridges' is likely a mispronunciation of 'cool breeze'; replace with 'cool breezes'. Suggestion: check subject-verb agreement and collocations ('cool breezes').

× And the scenery at the mountains are too good that I can enjoy with my family friends.

✓ And the scenery in the mountains is so beautiful that I can enjoy it with my family and friends.

'Scenery' is uncountable singular, so use 'is' not 'are'. Use 'in the mountains' rather than 'at the mountains'. 'Too good that' is ungrammatical; use 'so beautiful that'. 'Family friends' is ambiguous; use 'family and friends'. Also include 'it' with 'enjoy'. Suggestion: 'the scenery in the mountains is so beautiful that I can enjoy it with my family and friends.'

× For example, last year I went on a road trip with my parents on the mountains.

✓ For example, last year I went on a road trip to the mountains with my parents.

Use preposition 'to' with 'went on a trip to the mountains'. 'On the mountains' is incorrect. Place 'with my parents' after the destination for natural word order. Suggestion: 'I went on a road trip to the mountains with my parents.'