旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your answer more coherent and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one brief specific detail using a linking word. Reduce hesitations and incorrect verb forms. For example, say when and why you look out the window and describe one detail you notice.

範例: Yes, I often look out the window when I travel by car, especially when I go to school or hang out with friends. Because I usually travel through the city, I like to watch busy streets and tall buildings. For example, I often notice colorful shop signs and the traffic lights changing, which makes the journey more interesting.

建議: Improve clarity and reduce hesitations. Begin with a direct statement, explain which app or how you store photos, and give a brief reason for taking them. Avoid fillers and be specific about what kinds of scenery you save.

範例: Yes, I often take photos from the car window and save them in a private album on my phone. I use an app like Google Photos to organize them, so I can look back at my trips. For instance, I usually photograph colorful murals or sunrises because they remind me of special moments.

建議: Give a clear, grammatical preference with specific supporting reasons and one contrasting point. Avoid unclear vocabulary (e.g. 'airmorphies', 'celery', 'mutton') and hesitations. Use linking words like 'because' and 'however' to structure your answer and provide concrete sensory details.

範例: I prefer the sea because I grew up in a coastal city and enjoy the fresh sea breeze and open views. For example, I like walking on the beach at sunset and listening to the waves, which relaxes me. However, I also enjoy mountains for hiking when I want peace and exercise.

× Yes I do when I go to school or hanging out with friends by car I usually I usually watch the street and the scenery around the car and I is really busy because I I'm going in city so.

✓ Yes, I do. When I go to school or hang out with friends by car, I usually watch the street and the scenery around the car, and it is really busy because I'm going into the city.

Multiple issues: verb forms and sentence structure. 'hanging out' should be 'hang out' to match the present simple 'When I...'; 'I usually I usually' is repetition; 'I is really busy' uses wrong subject and verb — 'it is really busy' or 'the area is really busy'; 'I'm going in city' should be 'I'm going into the city' or 'I'm going to the city'. Suggestions: keep consistent verb forms (use base form after 'when I'), remove repetitions, use correct subject for 'is', and use correct preposition 'into' or include article 'the' before 'city'.

× Yes, I do uh, I have a private, uh, app like locate and I usually update these photos to to in there, uh, is help me, uh, stop my memories in there and uh, when I see some beautiful things, I usually take it.

✓ Yes, I do. I have a private app like 'Locate' and I usually upload these photos there; it helps me store my memories, and when I see something beautiful, I usually take a photo.

Preposition and verb choice errors: 'update these photos to to in there' is incorrect — use 'upload photos there' or 'upload them to the app'. 'is help me' should be 'it helps me' (subject and verb). 'stop my memories' is wrong verb; 'store my memories' is correct. 'when I see some beautiful things, I usually take it' — 'something beautiful' is better and use 'take a photo' not 'take it'. Suggestions: use correct verbs for digital actions (upload, store), use 'there' or 'to the app' for location, ensure pronoun/verb agreement, and use singular/plural appropriately for 'something' vs 'things'.

× Well, I prefer the sea because I am from the beach cities. It, uh, is my countryside and I really love the sea. I love the fresh airmorphies and the, uh, fresh celery in there. But I also like mutton.

✓ Well, I prefer the sea because I am from coastal cities. It feels like my countryside and I really love the sea. I love the fresh air and the fresh scenery there. But I also like mountains.

Several vocabulary and preposition issues: 'beach cities' is better as 'coastal cities'; 'It is my countryside' is awkward — 'it feels like my countryside' or 'it is like my countryside'. 'fresh airmorphies' and 'fresh celery' are incorrect words — likely meant 'fresh air' and 'scenery' or 'atmosphere'. 'But I also like mutton' is wrong word for mountains; 'mutton' is sheep meat, likely intended 'mountains'. Suggestions: choose correct vocabulary (air, scenery, mountains), use natural collocations ('coastal cities', 'fresh air'), and ensure word choice matches meaning.