旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời cần ngắn gọn, tự nhiên và chính xác về ngữ pháp. Tránh lỗi thì (tenses) và lỗi từ vựng, dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng rồi bổ sung chi tiết vị trí/ý nghĩa bằng liên từ hợp lý. Ví dụ: bắt đầu bằng "Yes, I do." rồi giải thích ngắn gọn lý do (thư giãn, ngắm cảnh) và kết thúc bằng một chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: thích xem cây cối, tòa nhà).

範例: Yes, I do. I usually look out of the window when I travel because it helps me relax and pass the time. For example, I enjoy watching trees and houses change as we move through different neighborhoods.

建議: Cần sửa lỗi từ vựng và cấu trúc câu để tự nhiên hơn. Tránh dùng cụm từ không chính xác như "absolute minded" hay các cụm từ lặp lại. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn (Yes, I often/always do.), giải thích lý do và nêu một ví dụ cụ thể (loại ảnh bạn chụp, khi nào bạn chụp).

範例: Yes, I often do. I like to take photos of interesting scenery so I can remember the trip later. For instance, I usually photograph unusual buildings or mountain views when I travel by car.

建議: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng, có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng. Hãy mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề đúng (I prefer the mountains.), nêu lý do cụ thể và đưa ra một ví dụ ngắn với thông tin rõ ràng (kể tên địa điểm và trải nghiệm). Tránh câu không hoàn chỉnh và lỗi chia động từ.

範例: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy peaceful landscapes and fresh air. For example, I visited Mount Fuji once and loved the hiking trails and amazing views there.

× Yes Ma, mostly every time I looked out the window when traveling.

✓ Yes Ma'am, I looked out the window most of the time when travelling.

The student used 'mostly every time' which is awkward; 'most of the time' is a natural expression. Also 'Ma' should be 'Ma'am' and 'traveling' British spelling is 'travelling' but either is acceptable. Use past simple 'looked' to match past context.

× Although is is a repetitive pattern all the way to the destination but is make my eyes relaxes and my friend can enjoy the beauties.

✓ Although it is a repetitive routine all the way to the destination, it relaxes my eyes and my friend can enjoy the scenery.

Multiple issues: 'is is' is incorrect repetition; 'is make' is ungrammatical; 'relaxes' must agree with singular subject 'it' and 'relaxes' not 'relaxes' (keep 'relaxes'); 'beauties' is unnatural; 'scenery' is correct. Use 'although' with a comma and do not add 'but' together. This fits 'Sentence structure errors' and 'Subject-verb agreement' but primary fix is structure.

× Yes, absolutely. I am a absolute minded person so I want to capture every moment of my trip so that it can bring many memories when I pass the pictures in the pictures.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I am an nostalgic person, so I want to capture every moment of my trip so that I can remember them when I look at the pictures.

Errors: 'a absolute' should be 'an absolute' but more natural is 'an nostalgic person' or 'I have an attachment to photos'. 'it can bring many memories' is awkward; use 'I can remember them' or 'they bring back memories'. 'pass the pictures in the pictures' is meaningless; replace with 'look at the pictures'. Tense and pronoun references adjusted for clarity.

× I'm prefer the mountain because it's very outstanding landscape and especially the Fuji mountain which I have experienced when I've traveled to chapens in a very.

✓ I prefer the mountains because they are very impressive, especially Mount Fuji, which I experienced when I travelled to Japan.

'I'm prefer' is incorrect; use 'I prefer'. 'the mountain' should be plural 'mountains' if speaking generally; match plural noun with 'they are'. 'outstanding landscape' is awkward — 'impressive' works. 'Fuji mountain' should be 'Mount Fuji'. 'which I have experienced when I've traveled to chapens in a very' is ungrammatical and unclear; likely intended 'which I experienced when I travelled to Japan.' Use past simple for completed trip. Pronouns and noun forms corrected.