旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は直接的で自然ですが、口癖（uh）が多く、冗長な表現が見られます。また、情報を整理して1〜2文で明確に伝えるとさらに良くなります。具体的には、トピックセンテンスの後に理由と具体例を短く付け加え、接続詞（because, when）を使って文の流れを滑らかにしてください。語彙は適切ですが、より自然な表現（e.g. refreshing, interesting）に置き換えると効果的です。

範例: Yes, I often look out the window when I travel, especially in new places, because the scenery feels refreshing and helps me notice local details.

建議: 内容は明確で理由も示されていますが、口語的な繰り返し（I don't... I don't...）があり、文を結合して簡潔にするとより自然です。支持文に具体例（例えば、窓の反射や振動でブレる）を一つ加えると説得力が増します。接続詞（because, so）で文をつなぎ、語彙に少し変化を付けてください。

範例: No, I usually don't take photos from a moving car, because reflections and motion make the pictures blurry, so I prefer to enjoy the view with my own eyes.

建議: 非常に良い具体的な経験を述べていますが、文法と時制の混乱（現在形と過去形の不整合）や冗長な表現があります。まず主文で好みを述べ、その後に過去の経験を一貫した時制で短く補足してください。数字は強い証拠なので残しつつ、接続詞（because, since, and）を使って文を整理すると流暢さが向上します。

範例: I prefer the mountains because I've been an avid climber since university — over the past 15 years I've climbed about 100 famous mountains in Japan, which took me roughly ten years.

× Yes, I do, uh, I like looking out the window, uh, fan.

✓ Yes, I do. I like looking out of the window, especially when I'm traveling somewhere new.

The original sentence has an unnecessary word 'fan' and punctuation issues. Use 'looking out of the window' or 'looking out the window' and join with the next clause. Keep present simple 'I like' + verb+ -ing is correct here. Remove filler words and correct punctuation for clarity.

× It feels, it makes me feel fresh.

✓ It makes me feel refreshed.

The phrase 'it feels, it makes me feel fresh' is awkward and repetitive. Use 'it makes me feel refreshed' to convey the result. 'Refreshed' is an adjective describing a feeling; this fits present simple result statements.

× No I don't. I don't usually take photos through the car window because the photos are not clear when I am on the car.

✓ No, I don't. I don't usually take photos through the car window because the photos are not clear when I am in the car.

Use 'in the car' not 'on the car' to indicate being inside a vehicle. Also add a comma after 'No' for natural speech punctuation. The modal/auxiliary usage 'don't usually' is correct.

× I just like watching by my own eyes.

✓ I just like watching with my own eyes.

The correct preposition is 'with' in the phrase 'with my own eyes'. 'By my own eyes' is ungrammatical. The sentence expresses preference for seeing directly rather than taking photos.

× I like mountains because I belong to the mountain climbing club in when I was a university student and I have been climbing mountains for about 15 years and I climbed 100 famous mountains in Japan.

✓ I like the mountains because I belonged to the mountain-climbing club when I was a university student. I have been climbing mountains for about 15 years and I have climbed 100 famous mountains in Japan.

Use 'the mountains' when speaking generally about that landscape type. 'Belong' should be past 'belonged' because it refers to a past state. Remove the extra 'in'. Use hyphen in 'mountain-climbing club'. For the climbing experience, use present perfect 'I have been climbing' for ongoing activity and 'I have climbed' to indicate completed climbs relevant to now.

× It took about 10 years.

✓ It took about 10 years to climb those mountains.

The short sentence 'It took about 10 years.' is grammatically correct but slightly unclear; adding 'to climb those mountains' clarifies the referent. Past tense 'took' is appropriate because the period is completed.