旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and correct small grammar issues (e.g. “when travelling” → “when travelling,” remove duplicate phrases).

範例: Yes, I usually look out the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy observing changing views. For example, I often take photos of interesting landscapes and listen to music at the same time, which helps me relax and makes the journey more enjoyable.

建議: Make one clear statement and support it with a specific example; avoid fragments and repetition. Use linking words (for example, when, because) and correct collocations (e.g. “unique scenery” not “unique sceneries”).

範例: Yes, I often take photos of scenery outside the car window because I want to capture special moments. For example, I photographed a misty valley last year when the light was perfect, and I keep those pictures as memories.

建議: Begin with a direct answer, then give a concise reason and a specific detail. Fix repetition and grammatical errors (e.g. remove duplicate words, correct “possess the most highest” to “has some of the highest”). Keep the response to 2–3 sentences maximum.

範例: I prefer the mountains because I grew up in a landlocked country surrounded by high peaks. For instance, Nepal has some of the highest mountains in the world, and their scenery and culture made me value mountain life more than the sea.

× Also while listening I prefer listening to music and looking outside the window.

✓ Also, while travelling I prefer listening to music and looking out of the window.

The sentence uses 'listening' twice and 'looking outside the window' is less natural. The context is present continuous/habitual, so use 'travelling' (present participle) and 'looking out of the window' for natural phrasing. Suggest removing the repeated 'listening' and adding a comma after 'Also'.

× Yes, I do take photos of the scenery outside the car or window that piques my interest or captures my attention.

✓ Yes, I take photos of scenery outside the car or the window that piques my interest or captures my attention.

The auxiliary 'do' is unnecessary for affirmative statements in present simple unless used for emphasis. Also 'the scenery' can be shortened to 'scenery' and 'car or window' needs parallelism; adding 'the' before 'window' improves clarity. Keep tense present simple for habitual action.

× I love taking unique.

✓ I love taking unique photos.

The adjective 'unique' cannot stand alone without a noun here. The sentence lacks the object; add 'photos' to complete the idea.

× I love taking capturing the photos of unique sceneries and incidences.

✓ I love capturing photos of unique scenes and incidents.

The phrase 'taking capturing' is an incorrect combination of verbs; choose one verb, here 'capturing'. 'Sceneries' is uncommon; use 'scenes'. 'Incidences' is incorrect in this context; use 'incidents'. Also remove the unnecessary article 'the' before plural nouns.

× Since my since my motherland is a landlocked country, I have always been surrounded by the mountains and never been exposed to the sea.

✓ Since my motherland is a landlocked country, I have always been surrounded by mountains and have never been exposed to the sea.

The phrase repeats 'since my' twice — remove the duplication. Use 'mountains' without 'the' for general reference, and include the auxiliary 'have' before 'never been' to form the present perfect passive correctly.

× So I do prefer the mountains and our country Nepal possess the most highest.

✓ So I prefer the mountains, and our country Nepal has the highest peaks.

'Do prefer' is unnecessary; simple present 'prefer' is fine. 'Possess' is awkward here; use 'has'. 'The most highest' is doubly comparative and ungrammatical — use 'the highest' or 'highest peaks'. Also add a comma before the conjunction for clarity and specify 'peaks' to complete the idea.