旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce hesitations and repeatings; give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details. Use correct tense and smoother phrasing. For example, start with a direct statement (“Yes, I often look out...”) then add why and a brief specific example.

範例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy seeing changing scenery. For example, on a recent trip I watched farmland and small villages pass by, which helped me relax during the journey.

建議: Be concise and avoid filler words. Use consistent tense (present simple for habits). Provide one specific detail about what you photograph or how you photograph to make the answer more vivid.

範例: Yes, I do. I usually take photos and short videos when I travel by car or bus. I often focus on interesting landscapes like mountain passes or coastal roads and use the camera’s burst mode to capture clear shots while the vehicle is moving.

建議: State your preference directly, remove fillers, and give two specific reasons with a brief example. Use linking words (because, for example, so) to make your answer logical and coherent.

範例: I prefer the sea to the mountains because being near the ocean relaxes me and I enjoy swimming. For example, when I visit the beach I collect shells, float in the water and feel calmer after a day by the sea.

× Yes, I don't umm, usually when I was travelling, I'm like, I like to watch uh, the two sides of uh, from the two sides of the window so that I can uh, uh, enjoy the view, uh, in the two sides.

✓ Yes, I usually, when I am travelling, I like to look out from both sides of the window so that I can enjoy the view on both sides.

The original mixes past and present tenses and contains awkward phrasing. Use present simple for habitual actions (I usually... I like) and present continuous for ongoing contexts (when I am travelling). Replace 'watch' with 'look out' and 'two sides' with 'both sides' for natural expression. Remove filler words and redundant phrases. Grammar Problem Type ID: 6

× I usually uh, take a lot of pictures and video clips when I was travelling uh, by car or bus.

✓ I usually take a lot of pictures and video clips when I travel by car or bus.

The sentence uses past tense 'was travelling' while 'usually' indicates a habitual action that should use present simple (I travel). Change 'was travelling' to 'travel' to match habitual aspect and remove filler words. Grammar Problem Type ID: 5

× So most of the time I try to use my cameras uh, setting uh, advanced settings to take uh, good video clips while traveling.

✓ So most of the time I try to use my camera's advanced settings to take good video clips while travelling.

Use singular 'camera' or possessive 'camera's' rather than plural 'cameras' when referring to settings on a single device; 'advanced settings' should be linked to 'camera's'. Also use consistent spelling 'travelling' as earlier. Remove extra fillers for clarity. Grammar Problem Type ID: 22

× I would love to go to the sea uh, than mountains, so I really enjoy being in the sea and floating around and umm uh, collecting the things uh, related to uh sea umm in the beach and uh spending time because I feel more relaxed and calm after going to the sea, even while.

✓ I would rather go to the sea than to the mountains, so I really enjoy being in the sea, floating around, and collecting things related to the sea on the beach. I like spending time there because I feel more relaxed and calm after going to the sea.

Use 'would rather... than' for preferences (comparative structure). Include 'to' before 'the mountains' and use parallel structure for activities (floating around, collecting). 'In the beach' is incorrect; use 'on the beach'. Break long run-on sentence into two for clarity and remove filler words. 'Even while' is incomplete and unnecessary, so remove it. Grammar Problem Type ID: 25