旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more direct and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence (yes/no and brief reason), avoid contradictions (you said both yes and not), reduce fillers (uh, I love, um), and use linking words to explain: for example, mention when you look out (long journeys) and why (relaxation, interest in landscapes). Keep to 2–3 sentences and use correct grammar (e.g., "the breeze from the window" and "passing over my face").

範例: Yes, I usually look out the window when I travel, especially on long journeys, because I find the changing landscape relaxing. Also, I enjoy feeling the breeze from the open window as it makes the trip more refreshing.

建議: Clearer grammar and concise reasons will improve this answer. Start with a direct statement, then give two specific reasons linked with connectors (for example, "because" and "also"). Avoid hesitations and check verb forms ("my phone gets full"). Mention a brief example to make it specific (e.g., a memorable scene you chose not to photograph).

範例: No, I don't usually take photos from a moving car because my phone gets full quickly and the pictures often turn out blurry. Also, I prefer to enjoy the moment—for instance, I once watched a beautiful sunset instead of taking a photo because I wanted to remember how it felt.

建議: Make your preference statement clear and give specific, coherent reasons with better vocabulary and grammar. Begin with a concise topic sentence ("I prefer the mountains") then give 2–3 specific reasons with linking words ("because", "for example"). Avoid vague phrases ("just show the discipline") and instead describe what you mean (e.g., "their size and calmness inspire me"). Keep to under five sentences.

範例: I prefer the mountains because their calmness and size inspire me and make me feel motivated. For example, hiking up a mountain gives me a sense of achievement, and I enjoy the cool, fresh air which helps me relax and think clearly.

× 'Most of the time I do not because I like to watch the scenery itself, but I love, I love the breeze of the wind from the windows that passing through from my face.'

✓ 'Most of the time I do because I like to watch the scenery itself, but I love the breeze from the window passing across my face.'

'Error: incorrect use of verb + -ing form and word order. The original uses "that passing through from my face" which misplaces the participle and prepositions. Suggestion: use the present participle "passing" directly after the noun it modifies (the window breeze) and use correct prepositions "from the window" or "across my face." Also remove redundant phrases and fix subject meaning by changing "do not" to "do" to match intended meaning.'

× 'Well, I don't usually take photos outside the window from a car, mainly because my phone get full easily.'

✓ 'Well, I don't usually take photos out the car window, mainly because my phone gets full easily.'

'Error: incorrect preposition and subject-verb agreement. Use "out the car window" or "out of the car window" instead of "outside the window from a car." Also the verb must be "gets" to agree with singular subject "phone." Suggestion: simplify to "out the car window" and use "gets."

× 'Umm. And also one more reason that uh, I prefer to enjoy the view rather than photographing or capture it in the frame.'

✓ 'Also, another reason is that I prefer to enjoy the view rather than photograph or capture it in a frame.'

'Error: incorrect verb form for parallel structure and third person agreement. Use bare infinitive verbs "photograph" and "capture" after "rather than" for parallelism. Also add linking verb "is" for clarity: "another reason is that..." Suggestion: maintain parallel verb forms and include "is."

× 'Uh, well, I prefer the mountains rather than sea, mainly because mountain just show the discipline that how they just stand and just keep me motivating.'

✓ 'Well, I prefer the mountains rather than the sea, mainly because mountains just show the discipline of how they stand and keep me motivated.'

'Error: singular/plural and article use. Use "the sea" and plural "mountains" consistently. Also change "mountain just show" to "mountains just show" for subject-verb agreement and change awkward phrasing "keep me motivating" to "keep me motivated." Suggestion: use consistent plural nouns and correct participle/adjective forms.'

× 'It's just me or everyone, I don't know, but it's for me also and I really feel motivated by the mountains and the cold weather out there.'

✓ 'I don't know if it's just me or everyone, but it is the same for me, and I really feel motivated by the mountains and the cold weather there.'

'Error: awkward sentence structure and redundancy. Rearrange to "I don't know if it's just me or everyone" for clarity, replace "it's for me also" with "it is the same for me," and simplify "out there" to "there." Suggestion: reorder clauses for logical flow and remove filler words.'