旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, um), correct word choice (use “view” or “scenery” not “scenario”), and limit to 3–4 sentences. Add a brief specific detail (when or why) and a linking word for coherence.

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by car or bus. For example, I enjoy watching the countryside and farms as I drive home on weekends, because the changing light and fields are relaxing. Sometimes I even stop to take a short photo if the view is especially beautiful.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence, avoid vague phrases, and add a clear reason and an example. Use linking words (“however”, “so”) correctly and correct grammar (“the frequency has decreased”). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I used to take many photos from my car when I first bought it, but the frequency has decreased now. However, I still take pictures occasionally when the view is unusual or particularly striking, such as during sunset over the fields.

建議: Answer directly (State preference), remove fillers, give a clear reason and a specific example or frequency. Use correct phrasing (“I prefer the sea” and “the sound of the sea at night”). Limit to 2–3 sentences for clarity.

範例: I prefer the sea because I love the sound of the waves at night; it helps me relax. For example, I visit Cox's Bazar two or three times a year to enjoy the beach and the peaceful atmosphere.

× Or actually all the time, all the time.

✓ Actually, all the time.

The original has redundant filler words 'Or actually' which disrupt tense and clarity. Use 'Actually, all the time.' to state a habitual present action clearly. Avoid leading conjunctions when simply answering.

× I uh, look, uh, around the, the scenario from uh, my car.

✓ I look around at the scenery from my car.

Use the noun 'scenery' and the preposition 'at' after 'look' to form 'look at the scenery'. Remove fillers and duplicate words. 'Scenario' is incorrect here; 'scenery' is the intended noun.

× In fact, uh, sometimes while driving as well, I uh, look at my windshield and uh, I enjoy the scenario very much and uh, traveling from, from traveling from brass as well.

✓ Sometimes while driving, I look through the windshield and enjoy the scenery a lot; I also enjoy traveling from places like Cox's Bazar.

Multiple issues: use 'scenery' not 'scenario', 'look through the windshield' is more natural than 'look at my windshield' when observing outside, and 'brass' seems to be a mistake for 'Bazar' (Cox's Bazar). Simplify sentence structure and correct word choice. Maintain present tense for habitual actions.

× Well, when I first bought my car, I used to take a lot of photos, but now it has become a regular scene for me.

✓ When I first bought my car, I used to take a lot of photos, but now it has become a regular part of my routine.

'Regular scene' is unnatural; 'regular part of my routine' conveys the intended meaning. Tenses are correct (past habitual 'used to' and present perfect/simple present for current state). Adjust noun choice for clarity.

× So it is not like that I don't take pictures anymore, but it the rate has been decreased.

✓ It's not that I don't take pictures anymore, but the frequency has decreased.

Correct sentence structure: 'It's not that...' and use 'frequency' instead of awkward 'rate has been decreased'. Use active form 'has decreased' rather than passive 'has been decreased.' Maintain present perfect to indicate change up to now.

× Well, personally, uh, see, because, uh, I love, see and, uh, I love the sound of the sea at the night very much.

✓ Personally, I love the sea, and I really enjoy the sound of the sea at night.

Remove filler words and correct word order: 'love the sea' not 'love, see'. Use 'at night' (no article). Improve adverb placement: 'really enjoy' rather than 'very much' at sentence end for natural flow.

× In fact, that's why I, uh, go to Cox's Bazar, uh, two or three times a year.

✓ In fact, that's why I go to Cox's Bazar two or three times a year.

Remove filler words and commas. The tense and meaning are correct; simplification improves fluency and clarity.