旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise, correct small errors, and add one specific supporting detail. Start with a clear topic sentence, fix word choice (e.g. sight not site), and use a linking word for clarity.

範例: Yes. I prefer a window seat when I travel because looking outside makes the journey feel quicker and more relaxing. For example, seeing green trees or passing villages helps me unwind and notice changes in the landscape, which makes the trip more enjoyable.

建議: Correct word choices and tighten the answer. Begin with a direct statement, give a specific example, and use a linking phrase to explain why photos are meaningful.

範例: Sometimes. For instance, if I see a colourful sunset from the window I often take a photo because the light is beautiful, and the picture helps me remember the scene and feel optimistic about the next day.

建議: Make the response more fluent and natural: remove hesitations, avoid vague phrases, and add a concise specific reason or example. Use linking words to present reason and result.

範例: I prefer the mountains because climbing them feels like a personal challenge and achievement. For example, reaching a summit after a tough hike gives a great sense of accomplishment and a fantastic view, which I enjoy more than relaxing by the sea.

× Yes and I also prefer a seat which is by the window when I'm traveling on a train because personally I think looking out the window makes you feel the time is passing faster and also looking further and to see green trees is beneficial for my site.

✓ Yes, and I also prefer a seat by the window when I'm traveling by train because I personally think looking out the window makes time feel like it is passing faster, and seeing distant green trees is beneficial for my sight.

Issues: 'which is by the window' is wordy and nonrestrictive clause unnecessary; use 'by the window'. 'on a train' -> 'by train' or 'by train' usually 'by train' but 'when I'm traveling by train' is natural; moved 'personally' before 'think'. 'makes you feel the time is passing faster' -> passivelike phrasing awkward; 'makes time feel like it is passing faster' is clearer. 'looking further and to see green trees' is ungrammatical; changed to 'seeing distant green trees'. 'site' is incorrect word choice for vision; use 'sight'. Suggestion: simplify clauses, use correct adjective vs noun ('sight'), and keep parallel structure in lists.

× Sometimes when I see a sunset from the car window I will take photos because the colors are beautiful and photographing the veal helps me remember the moment and makes me feel hopeful about the next day.

✓ Sometimes when I see a sunset from the car window I take photos because the colors are beautiful, and photographing the view helps me remember the moment and makes me feel hopeful about the next day.

Issues: tense/modal: 'I will take' is unnecessary future; simple present 'I take photos' is natural for habitual actions. 'photographing the veal' uses wrong noun 'veal' (meat); should be 'view'. The first clause needs a comma before 'and'. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions and correct word choice 'view'.

× I prefer the mountains to the sea because I think for human beings, climbing to the top of the mountains is a hard thing, and once people succeed in climbing to the top, it it is a symbol of, uh, challenging the impossible.

✓ I prefer the mountains to the sea because I think, for human beings, climbing to the top of a mountain is hard, and once people succeed in reaching the top it is a symbol of having challenged the impossible.

Issues: 'climbing to the top of the mountains is a hard thing' is awkward and mixes plural and article; 'a mountain' or 'the mountain' is clearer. 'climbing to the top' repeated; changed to 'reaching the top' to avoid repetition. Duplicate 'it it' removed. 'a symbol of, uh, challenging the impossible' is ungrammatical; changed to 'a symbol of having challenged the impossible' to express completed action. Suggestion: use consistent singular/plural, avoid filler words, vary verbs for clarity, and ensure correct verb forms for intended meaning.