旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear and natural but a bit repetitive and contains minor grammatical issues (e.g., 'admire the nature' -> 'admire nature'). To improve, use a concise topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details connected with a linking word. Vary vocabulary (e.g., 'scenery', 'landscape', 'relaxing') and avoid filler words like 'yeah'.

範例: Yes — I often look out of the window when I travel because I enjoy admiring the changing landscape. For example, I like watching fields and small towns pass by, and I sometimes take photos to remember interesting views.

建議: The idea is understandable but the answer is disorganized and contains repetition and unfinished sentence fragments. Improve by giving a clear topic sentence, then explain briefly why and how you take photos. Use linking words (because/so) and avoid repeating phrases. Correct grammar (e.g., 'I like my phone because it has a good camera').

範例: Yes, I often take photos through the car window because my phone has a good camera. For instance, I stop shooting when reflections appear, but I try to capture interesting buildings or sunsets as we pass them.

建議: The response answers the question but is unclear and contains odd phrasing ('cold breathing', 'to most') and irrelevant or risky examples (sharks). Improve by stating a clear preference, giving two specific reasons with linking words, and using accurate vocabulary (e.g., 'sea' not 'seas', 'fresh sea breeze'). Avoid mentioning dangerous animals as a main reason unless phrased carefully.

範例: I prefer the sea because I enjoy the fresh sea breeze and the relaxed atmosphere. For example, I like walking along the shore and watching dolphins or seabirds, which makes holidays feel peaceful.

× I love to admire the nature and also take some photos for memories.

✓ I love admiring nature and also taking some photos as memories.

The original mixes infinitive 'to admire' with context where gerunds ('admiring', 'taking') are more natural after 'love' when describing habitual actions. Also 'the nature' is incorrect article usage; 'nature' is uncountable and does not need 'the'. Use consistent gerund forms for parallel structure.

× Yeah, looking out of the window is so relaxing and fulfilling.

✓ Yeah, looking out the window is so relaxing and fulfilling.

Both 'look out of the window' and 'look out the window' can be used, but in this conversational context 'looking out the window' is more idiomatic. Remove 'of' for smoother phrasing.

× Yes, I usually take a lot of photos when I'm in the car through my window for memories and also I like my phone.

✓ Yes, I usually take a lot of photos through the car window to keep as memories, and I like my phone.

The original sentence is awkward and repetitive ('in the car through my window' and 'for memories and also I like my phone'). Reorder to 'through the car window' and use 'to keep as memories' for clarity; combine clauses with 'and' to avoid a run-on structure.

× My phone has a good camera so most of the time I try to to to rate my camera and.

✓ My phone has a good camera, so most of the time I try to take pictures with it.

The original has repeated words 'to to to' and incorrect verb 'rate' likely intended as 'take' (pictures). Also the pronoun for the phone should be 'it' when referring back to 'my phone'. End the sentence properly; avoid trailing conjunctions.

× I prefer the seas because of the cold breathing and also to most, and also to seeing sharks is so fulfilling.

✓ I prefer the sea because of the cool breeze, and seeing sharks is so exciting.

'Seas' is unusual here; 'the sea' is the common singular reference when choosing between mountains or the sea. 'Cold breathing' is incorrect collocation; 'cool breeze' or 'cool air' is correct. 'To most' is unclear and unnecessary. 'Fulfilling' is acceptable but 'exciting' fits better for seeing sharks. Simplify the sentence for clarity.

× And dolphins, yeah.

✓ And dolphins are great to see, too.

The fragment 'And dolphins, yeah.' is informal and lacks a verb. Providing a full clause ('dolphins are great to see, too') completes the thought and matches the conversational tone.