旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clear, accurate and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using correct vocabulary and linking words. Avoid unclear phrases and incorrect word choices (e.g. “training scenery”, “bath the town”). Keep answers to no more than 4–5 sentences and correct basic grammar (traveling → travelling or traveling consistently, look out of → look out the window).

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I find the passing scenery relaxing. For example, I enjoy watching small country houses and people walking along the road, which helps me unwind after a busy day. I often notice little details like colourful gardens or farmers working in the fields.

建議: This answer is unclear and contains many irrelevant or incorrect phrases. Give a short, coherent response: one clear topic sentence (yes/no), then 1–2 concrete supporting details or an example. Use simple, correct vocabulary and grammar. If you sometimes take photos, say when and why, and give a brief example (e.g. special views, good light).

範例: Sometimes I do. If the view is particularly pretty or unusual, I take photos on my phone to remember it — for example, I once photographed a colourful sunset and a mountainous village from the car window.

建議: The response has a clear preference and reason but contains vocabulary errors and minor grammar mistakes. State the main idea in one sentence, then add a specific supporting reason or example using correct words (e.g. ‘landscapes’, ‘take photos’, ‘capture’). Keep it concise and use linking words if adding detail.

範例: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy dramatic landscapes and fresh air. For example, when I drive through mountainous areas I often take photos from the car window to capture unique views I might not see again.

× I always look out of the window when I'm traveling by bus or car because I enjoy watching the training scenery.

✓ I always look out of the window when I'm traveling by bus or car because I enjoy watching the passing scenery.

The word 'training' is incorrect here; 'passing' (verb + -ing form) correctly describes scenery moving past the window. Use of the -ing form 'passing' acts as a participle modifying 'scenery' to indicate motion. Suggestion: replace incorrect lexical choice with 'passing'.

× For example, I like to say the countryside buildings are people along the road.

✓ For example, I like to say that the countryside buildings and people along the road look interesting.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear (sentence structure error). It lacks proper conjunction and parallel structure. Adding 'that' introduces the clause; join 'buildings and people' with 'and' and include a verb phrase 'look interesting' to complete meaning. Suggestion: restructure to state what you mean clearly.

× It helps me relax and bath the town.

✓ It helps me relax and take in the town.

'Bath the town' is incorrect idiomatically and grammatically. Use a verb phrase 'take in' to mean observe and enjoy scenery. 'Take' with particle 'in' is correct; 'relax and take in the town' keeps parallel verb forms. Suggestion: use correct collocation 'take in' instead of 'bath'.

× It's sometimes actually a winner in America in Malaysia, I so sleepy and then put some time when I'm just generally that last mice with about with me and I yes, I take some full stalls that are in my phone.

✓ Sometimes when I travel in America or Malaysia I feel so sleepy, but I still take photos on my phone of interesting scenes.

The original sentence is nonsensical and contains multiple structure errors and unrelated fragments. I reconstructed it to match likely intended meaning: contrast of sleepiness and still taking photos. The correction fixes sentence flow, removes unrelated words, and uses clear verb phrases. Suggestion: keep sentences simple and focused; avoid inserting irrelevant fragments.

× I prefer the mountains because I love dramatic land caps and fresh air.

✓ I prefer the mountains because I love dramatic landscapes and fresh air.

'Land caps' is incorrect word choice; 'landscapes' is the correct noun to describe scenic land. This is an adjective/noun choice error. Suggestion: use 'landscape' (or 'landscapes') for natural scenery.

× When I travel or go on long drives, I often takes photos from the car window to castle unique views I might never see again.

✓ When I travel or go on long drives, I often take photos from the car window to capture unique views I might never see again.

Two errors: 'takes' does not agree with subject 'I' (subject-verb agreement); correct form is 'take'. 'Castle' is an incorrect word here — use 'capture' to mean photograph or record. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with subject and choose correct verb for intended meaning.