旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clear, concise and use correct vocabulary and grammar. Start with a direct topic sentence answering the question (Yes/No). Then give one or two specific supporting details using correct nouns and verbs, and connect ideas with simple linking words. Avoid unclear words like “wheel” and incorrect tense or article use.

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. I enjoy watching changing landscapes, such as green fields and small villages, because they make long journeys more relaxing. For example, last month I watched a sunrise over rice paddies and took a moment to enjoy the view.

建議: Answer directly, keep sentences grammatically correct and give a specific example with correct verb forms. Use linking words such as “for example” and keep to 2–4 sentences. Correct subject-verb agreement and article use will improve clarity.

範例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window. For example, when I visited Swanette with my friends last month, most of my pictures were of the coastal views and old houses we passed. I like to keep those photos as memories of the trip.

建議: Give a clear preference or say you have no preference, then support it with specific reasons. Use correct vocabulary (mountains/sea), correct articles and nouns, and logical linking words (on the one hand/on the other hand, however, therefore). Avoid unclear phrases like “beautiful wheel” or “that business.”

範例: I prefer the sea because I enjoy swimming and relaxing on the beach. However, I also like mountains for hiking and quiet forests. If I had to choose one, I would pick the sea because I find coastal scenery more refreshing and relaxing.

× From my point of view, the scenery out of the window while traveling is the best wheel that I ever seen in my life and I always take a chance to see them.

✓ From my point of view, the scenery outside the window while traveling is the most beautiful thing I have ever seen in my life, and I always take any chance to see it.

Errors: 'out of the window' is unnatural preposition use (use 'outside'); 'wheel' is the wrong noun (should be 'thing' or 'view'); 'I ever seen' is incorrect tense/form (should be 'I have ever seen' — present perfect); 'them' refers to scenery (uncountable) so use singular 'it' or 'the scenery'; 'best' with unmodified noun often better as 'most beautiful' (adjective form). Suggestion: use correct preposition 'outside', use appropriate noun 'view' or 'thing', use present perfect 'have seen' for life experience, and match pronoun to uncountable noun 'it'.

× Now to be honest, I always take photos of the scenery outside the car window.

✓ To be honest, I always take photos of the scenery outside the car window.

Error: extraneous 'Now' at the start is unnecessary and informal; though not strictly wrong, removing it makes the sentence more natural. Suggestion: begin with 'To be honest' for a cleaner response.

× For instance, the last time when I visited Swanette with my friends, the majority of the photos was taken like this.

✓ For instance, the last time I visited Swanette with my friends, the majority of the photos were taken like this.

Error: subject-verb agreement — 'the majority of the photos' is plural so verb should be 'were' not 'was'. Also 'the last time when I visited' is wordy; 'the last time I visited' is more natural. Suggestion: use plural verb 'were' to agree with plural subject 'photos'.

× I'm on the fence about this question because while on the one hand mountains have its beautiful places and forests, on the other hand see has its beautiful wheel.

✓ I'm on the fence about this question because, on the one hand, mountains have beautiful places and forests; on the other hand, the sea has beautiful views.

Errors: pronoun agreement and word choice — 'mountains have its beautiful places' mixes plural subject with singular possessive 'its' (should be 'their' or rephrase); 'see' is a misspelling of 'sea'; 'wheel' is wrong noun (should be 'views' or 'scenery'). Also punctuation/structure improved by adding commas and using parallel construction 'on the one hand... on the other hand'. Suggestion: use 'their' for plural possessive or restructure, correct spelling to 'sea', and use 'views'.

× So after the day the sea is that business.

✓ So at the end of the day, I prefer the sea.

Errors: phrase 'after the day the sea is that business' is ungrammatical and uses wrong idiom and word order. 'At the end of the day' is the correct idiom meaning 'ultimately'; 'I prefer the sea' clearly states the conclusion. Suggestion: replace awkward phrase with common idiom 'at the end of the day' and state preference directly.