旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is natural and communicates the idea well, but it is slightly repetitive and longer than needed. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two concise supporting reasons with a linking word. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., “relaxed” or “calmed”) and correct minor grammar (e.g., “makes me feel peaceful” instead of “make me feel peace”).

範例: Yes — I always look out the window when I travel by bus or car because watching the scenery helps me relax after a busy day. For example, seeing green fields or city lights calms me and lets me unwind before I arrive home.

建議: Good response: clear and concise with relevant details. To improve further, add a linking phrase to show cause or frequency and give one specific example of a recent photo or why you chose it. Also avoid repeating similar words like “capture the moment” and “keep memories.”

範例: Yes, I do. I often take photos of fields, skies or interesting landscapes when I travel, especially at sunset because the light is beautiful. For instance, last month I photographed an orange sunset over rolling fields and later shared the best photos with my friends.

建議: Clear preference and good personal detail. Improve by making the answer more concise and grammatically precise (e.g., “watch the waves,” “after a busy week”). Add a linking word to connect reason and provide one specific image or activity to make it more vivid.

範例: I prefer the sea because the breeze and the sound of waves help me unwind after a busy week. For example, I often sit on the harbour, watch the waves and listen to seabirds while sipping a hot drink — it always helps me relax.

× Yes, definitely, I would always look out the window and enjoy the scenery when traveling by bus and car, so looking like enjoying the spectacular view could make me feel calm and make me feel peace.

✓ Yes, definitely, I would always look out the window and enjoy the scenery when traveling by bus or car, because enjoying the spectacular view can make me feel calm and peaceful.

The original sentence uses 'looking like enjoying' which is ungrammatical; it incorrectly attempts to combine verbs and an idiom. Change to 'because enjoying' uses the present participle correctly to give a reason. Also replace 'could make me feel peace' with 'can make me feel peaceful' (adjective 'peaceful' describes a person). Use 'or' instead of 'and' when choosing between bus or car to match natural English.

× I often snap pictures of the field outside the car window to capture the moment and keep memories.

✓ I often snap pictures of the fields outside the car window to capture the moment and keep memories.

If the speaker means general scenes, use the plural 'fields' or more general 'the field' depending on context. 'Keep memories' is slightly odd but acceptable; better is 'preserve memories' or 'keep memories' is okay. This correction assumes plural landscapes are intended; it addresses a singular/plural nuance.

× I especially like to photograph beautiful skies or interesting landscapes and then share the best shots with my friends and family.

✓ I especially like to photograph beautiful skies and interesting landscapes, and then share the best shots with my friends and family.

This sentence is mostly correct. The correction simply changes 'or' to 'and' to imply the speaker enjoys both types. The comma before 'and' clarifies the clause separation. No major grammar error; change is stylistic for naturalness.

× I definitely prefer the sea. In my spare time I usually go to the harbour and sit on the shore to enjoy the sea breeze and watch the wave, which helps me unwind after busy week and makes me feel peaceful.

✓ I definitely prefer the sea. In my spare time I usually go to the harbour and sit on the shore to enjoy the sea breeze and watch the waves, which helps me unwind after a busy week and makes me feel peaceful.

Use 'waves' (plural) when referring to the sea in general. Also include the article 'a' before 'busy week' ('a busy week') to form a correct noun phrase. These are preposition/article and number issues improving grammaticality and naturalness.