旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh) and incomplete endings. Mention a concrete example (what you see) and a reason why it relaxes you.

範例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus. For example, I enjoy watching green fields and small villages because the changing scenery helps me relax and feel refreshed. Also, seeing new places makes the journey more interesting.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and complete the reason. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide a specific example of what you photograph and why. Avoid repetition and finish your thought fully.

範例: Yes, I often take photos of scenery outside the car window. For instance, I photograph sunsets and unusual buildings because looking at the pictures later helps me remember the trip and share the views with my friends.

建議: State your preference clearly, then give two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because / so). Use correct grammar for comparisons and avoid repetitive phrases. Add a short personal detail to make it natural.

範例: I prefer the mountains to the sea because I enjoy hiking and the fresh, cool air. For example, I like walking on mountain trails and admiring the views, which makes me feel peaceful and energetic.

× Yeah, sure, when I go, uh, in the bus, I usually enjoy by looking outside through window and uh, uh, when I see a nature and, uh, explore the new things and, uh, inhale fresh air, it gives me a sense of relaxation and.

✓ Yeah, sure. When I go by bus, I usually enjoy looking outside through the window, and when I see nature and explore new things and inhale fresh air, it gives me a sense of relaxation.

The phrase 'enjoy by looking' is incorrect; after 'enjoy' use the gerund form directly ('enjoy looking'). 'Through window' needs the definite article 'the'. 'A nature' is incorrect because 'nature' is an uncountable noun and should not take 'a'. Also remove redundant 'and' at the end. Suggestions: use 'enjoy looking', 'the window', 'see nature', and remove filler words to make the sentence clear. Grammar problem type ID: 8

× Yeah, I take a different scenes, I take photo of different scene because when it when I go back and see pictures, it gives rel it gives.

✓ Yeah, I take different scenes; I take photos of different scenes because when I look back and see the pictures, they make me remember the trip.

'A different scenes' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'different scenes' without 'a'. 'I take photo of different scene' should be plural 'photos of different scenes'. 'When it when I go back' is repetitive; use 'when I look back'. 'It gives rel it gives' is incomplete; clarify result as 'they make me remember the trip.' Suggestions: match plural/singular, remove repetition, and complete the clause to express the result clearly. Grammar problem type ID: 14

× I think I prefer look more looking mountain because it is very high in it is very high in feet and looking nice when I see mountain.

✓ I think I prefer looking at mountains more because they are very high and look nice when I see them.

After 'prefer' use the gerund form 'looking at'. 'Mountain' should be plural 'mountains' when speaking generally and must agree with verbs ('they are'). The phrase 'very high in it is very high in feet' is redundant and ungrammatical; simplify to 'they are very high'. 'Looking nice when I see mountain' needs pronoun agreement and article: 'they look nice when I see them.' Suggestions: use 'prefer looking at mountains', use plural nouns for general statements, and ensure subject-verb agreement. Grammar problem type ID: 27}]}anceled?