旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is unclear and disorganized. To improve, give a direct topic sentence stating whether you look out the window, then add one or two specific supporting details (when, why, what you notice). Use linking words (for example, because, such as, also) and keep answers to no more than five concise sentences. Focus on correct word choices ( scenery, travel ) and simple grammar (subject-verb agreement, clear pronouns).

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus because I enjoy watching the changing scenery. For example, I like seeing fields and small towns pass by, which helps me relax. Also, when the weather is good, I often spot interesting clouds or birds.

建議: The answer is vague and grammatically confused. Start with a clear yes/no and a reason, then give one specific example or condition (when you take photos). Use simple, correct sentences and linking words like because or when. Mention specific subjects (sunset, mountains, city skyline) to make your answer concrete.

範例: Yes, I sometimes take photos of the scenery outside the car window, especially when the light looks nice. For instance, I often photograph sunsets or dramatic clouds when travelling in the evening because the colors are beautiful.

建議: Your preference is stated but the explanation is confusing. Give a direct topic sentence (I prefer the sea/mountains), then provide one or two clear reasons with specific details (relaxation, activities, memories). Use linking words (because, so, for example) and correct vocabulary (sea, beach, mountains). Keep it concise and coherent.

範例: I prefer the sea because I find the sound of waves very relaxing and I enjoy swimming. For example, when I go to the beach I like walking along the shore at sunset, which helps me unwind after a busy week.

× At the scenery when traveling by bus.

✓ I look at the scenery when traveling by bus.

The original fragment lacks a clear subject and verb to form a complete sentence (sentence structure error). Adding 'I' as subject and 'look' as the verb completes the sentence and matches the question context.

× So every time I put some filters, different kinds of singing.

✓ Every time I travel, I notice different kinds of scenery.

The original is ungrammatical and contains wrong words ('put some filters', 'singing') that do not fit meaning. This is a sentence structure and word choice issue. Replacing with 'I notice different kinds of scenery' creates a clear subject-verb-object structure and conveys the intended idea.

× How do you want to go?

✓ How do you want me to answer?

Out of context, the sentence is unclear. It lacks a clear object and purpose. Changing it to 'How do you want me to answer?' provides a complete structure and makes sense in a conversation.

× So I think it was really interesting to have the same sceneries with every time I went to I I go to the benefits.

✓ I think it is really interesting to see the same scenery every time I travel to the area.

The original has multiple structural problems: tense inconsistency ('was' vs present), repetition ('I I go'), incorrect plural 'sceneries' and unclear phrase 'go to the benefits'. This correction uses consistent present tense 'is' for a general opinion, uses uncountable 'scenery', and provides a coherent structure.

× Yes, I take both those up assuming it helps out.

✓ Yes, I take photos of both; I assume it helps.

Original uses ambiguous phrases 'take both those up' and wordy 'assuming it helps out'. Clarifying to 'take photos of both' and 'I assume it helps' corrects verb usage and makes sentence natural. This addresses third-person singular indirectly by clarifying subject and verb agreement.

× You will change many times.

✓ The scene changes many times.

Original address 'You will change many times' is incorrect because 'you' is inappropriate here; the intended subject is 'scene'. Using 'The scene changes many times' corrects subject-verb relationship and meaning.

× Depends on the weather or weather feelings and cycles before my at the moment.

✓ It depends on the weather, the atmosphere, and the time of day.

Original has incorrect and confusing prepositional phrases ('before my at the moment'). Rewriting with correct prepositions and nouns—'depends on the weather, the atmosphere, and the time of day'—clarifies meaning and fixes preposition use.

× Those I often are often to go to.

✓ I often go to those places.

Original is ungrammatical and wordy with repeated 'often'. Reordering to 'I often go to those places' provides a clear subject-verb-object structure and correct adverb placement.

× I prefer the steam because every time both of us do see that we really need for some time, we can possibly solution having a really beautiful time go down the sea and we make.

✓ I prefer the sea because whenever we both see it, we like to spend time there; we can have a really beautiful time by the seaside.

Original contains incorrect pronoun and noun use ('steam' for 'sea'), awkward clause structure, and wrong words ('solution', 'go down the sea'). This correction fixes the noun, clarifies pronouns ('we both'), improves clause connectors ('whenever'), and provides natural phrasing 'spend time there' and 'by the seaside'.