旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời tự nhiên nhưng có thể ngắn gọn và cụ thể hơn. Hãy bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, rồi thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ loại cảnh bạn thích) và một liên từ để nối ý. Tránh lặp ý (“picturesque and relaxing” có thể gộp ý).

範例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus because I enjoy watching rural landscapes. For example, I like seeing green fields and small villages pass by, which I find calming, and I usually spend most of the trip just observing.

建議: Nội dung tốt nhưng cấu trúc cuối câu yếu; câu phụ (‘Although I am not good at photography’) nên liên kết chặt hơn với câu chính. Thêm một liên từ giải thích hành động (ví dụ vì sao vẫn chụp dù không chuyên). Cố giữ tối đa 4-5 câu và dùng từ vựng cụ thể hơn về kỹ thuật hoặc cảm xúc.

範例: Yes, I often take photos from the car, especially of rolling hills and striking light, because these images help me remember the trip. Even though I’m not skilled at photography, I still try to capture interesting colors and shapes to share later.

建議: Câu trả lời nêu được so sánh nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp và một từ bị sai (‘your hiking’ nên ‘go hiking’). Cần câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó dùng liên từ để so sánh hai lựa chọn và nêu lý do cụ thể. Tránh những lỗi nhỏ về động từ và trật tự từ.

範例: It depends on my mood: I prefer the mountains when I want peace and to go hiking and take photos of the scenery, because it’s quiet and restorative. However, I choose the sea when I want to relax, sunbathe and listen to the waves, which helps me unwind.

× Yes, I love looking at the scenery through the window when I travel.

✓ Yes, I love looking at the scenery through the window when I travel.

No change needed. The verb 'looking' is correctly used as a present participle after 'love' to express a general preference.

× The view is often very picturesque and relaxing, especially when the bus passes through the countryside, so I enjoy watching the landscape go by.

✓ The view is often very picturesque and relaxing, especially when the bus passes through the countryside, so I enjoy watching the landscape go by.

No grammatical correction required. Sentence structure is correct: 'especially when...' gives a subordinate clause and 'so I enjoy...' shows a resulting action.

× Yes, I often take pictures of the scenery from the car.

✓ Yes, I often take pictures of the scenery from the car.

Sentence is correct. 'Take pictures of' plus location 'from the car' is natural and grammatical.

× For example, when I travel to the countryside, I like to capture the rolling hills and unusual light because it helps me remember the trip.

✓ For example, when I travel to the countryside, I like to capture the rolling hills and unusual light because they help me remember the trip.

Pronoun reference error: 'light' and 'hills' are two items, so the plural pronoun 'they' should be used instead of 'it'. Use a plural pronoun to match plural antecedents.

× Although I am not good at photography.

✓ Although I am not good at photography, I still take pictures to keep memories.

Fragment: 'Although' introduces a subordinate clause and requires a main clause to complete the sentence. Add an independent clause to make a complete sentence.

× Well, it depends on my mood.

✓ Well, it depends on my mood.

No change needed. Present simple 'depends' correctly expresses a general truth about preference.

× I usually prefer the mountains when I want peace and quiet place because I can your hiking, take photos and enjoy the scenery.

✓ I usually prefer the mountains when I want peace and quiet because I can go hiking, take photos and enjoy the scenery.

Multiple errors: 'peace and quiet place' is incorrect word order and redundancy—use 'peace and quiet'. 'Your hiking' is incorrect pronoun and word form; correct phrase is 'go hiking'. Also ensure parallel verbs 'go hiking, take photos and enjoy' are in base form after 'can' or simply parallel infinitives. Removed redundant words and fixed vocabulary and word order.

× On the other hand, I prefer the sea when I want to unwind and soak up the sun while listening to the sound of the waves.

✓ On the other hand, I prefer the sea when I want to unwind and soak up the sun while listening to the sound of the waves.

No change needed. Present simple correctly expresses a habitual preference; verb forms and prepositions are appropriate.