旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (look at scenery, when I'm travelling), and give one specific reason with a linking word. Avoid redundant phrases like "look after look for my direction."

範例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I'm travelling by bus or car because I enjoy seeing changing landscapes. For example, on long trips I like watching villages and fields pass by, which helps me relax and keep track of where we are.

建議: This answer is clear but can be improved by removing repetition and adding a specific detail or example. Use a linking word to connect the reason and give a brief example of what you photograph.

範例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the window because I want to remember the journey. For instance, I usually photograph interesting houses or mountain views to look back on later.

建議: Good direct response. Improve by giving a slightly fuller explanation and a connecting phrase. Mention a specific aspect of mountains you enjoy (e.g., hiking, views) to make the answer more informative.

範例: I like both, but I prefer the mountains because I can't swim. Additionally, I enjoy hiking and the peaceful views in the mountains, which makes them more attractive to me.

× Yes, I often look out the window at the scenario when I'm travel during transporting because it is joyful for me to look after look for my direction.

✓ Yes, I often look out the window at the scenery when I'm traveling because it's enjoyable for me to see the view and check my direction.

Problems: wrong word choice 'scenario' should be 'scenery'; incorrect verb form and structure 'when I'm travel during transporting' is ungrammatical; awkward phrases 'it is joyful for me to look after look for my direction'. Corrections: use 'scenery' for landscape outside a vehicle; use present continuous 'I'm traveling' to match ongoing action while travelling; replace 'during transporting' with nothing or 'while travelling'; use contraction 'it's enjoyable' and clearer verbs 'see the view' and 'check my direction'. Suggestion: simplify the sentence into clear clauses: state the habitual action (I often look out), then reason with a simple clause (because I enjoy seeing the view and checking my direction).

× Yes, yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I would like to remember my journey.

✓ Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I would like to remember my journey.

Problems: repetition 'Yes, yes' is redundant rather than grammatical error. The sentence otherwise is acceptable. Minor suggestion: remove repeated 'yes' to sound natural. Tense is appropriate: 'often take' (present simple for habit) and 'would like' expresses polite desire and is fine. Suggestion: use a single 'Yes' to be concise.

× Well, I like both of them, but among them I prefer mountains because I can't swim.

✓ Well, I like both, but I prefer the mountains because I can't swim.

Problems: unnecessary 'of them' and awkward 'among them' make the sentence clumsy. Use 'both' alone when referring to two options. When preferring one, say 'I prefer the mountains' or 'I prefer the mountains to the sea.' Also add the definite article 'the' before 'mountains' and 'sea' when speaking of general types of landscape. Suggestion: simplify to 'I like both, but I prefer the mountains because I can't swim.' or 'I prefer the mountains to the sea because I can't swim.'