旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence. Avoid filler words (umm, uh) and repetition. Use one or two supporting details with linking words to make your answer coherent. Also correct tense and grammar (use present simple: gives, gives me a sense).

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel because it gives me a chance to enjoy natural scenery. For example, I like watching trees and rivers pass by, which helps me relax during long journeys.

建議: Answer directly and correct common errors (e.g., "take pictures," avoid repeating words). Give a clear reason and one specific example. Use linking words (for example, because) and concise phrasing.

範例: Yes, I often take pictures from the car window because I like to capture interesting landscapes. For example, last month I photographed a colorful sunset and later shared it on Instagram to remember the trip.

建議: State your preference clearly and give specific reasons with correct grammar (use plural/singular and tenses: "mountains," "remind me"). Use linking words (because, so) and one concrete detail to support your opinion.

範例: I prefer the mountains because my country is mountainous and they remind me of home. For instance, I enjoy hiking in green valleys and looking at the distant peaks, which makes me feel peaceful and connected to my culture.

× Yes, I look out from the window whenever I travel because it gave me a good umm, sense of umm landscape and it give me a good view of nature, which I love a lot so uh.

✓ Yes, I look out of the window whenever I travel because it gives me a good sense of the landscape and a good view of nature, which I love a lot.

The original sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly ('look' present vs 'gave' past) and uses incorrect verb form 'give' without agreement. Use present tense consistently for habitual actions: 'I look' and 'it gives'. Also change 'look out from the window' to the more natural 'look out of the window' and remove filler words. Use 'a good sense of the landscape' for natural phrasing.

× Moreover, it also gave me the sense of good umm, the sensory, the vision and also.

✓ Moreover, it also gives me a strong sensory impression and a pleasing view.

The verb 'gave' is past while the context describes a general, current effect; use present 'gives'. The original includes awkward phrasing ('the sensory, the vision'); replace with clear nouns 'sensory impression' and 'pleasing view'. Avoid trailing 'and also'.

× Yes, I always click a pictures of the photos whenever I look out from the car windows, especially during especially the I captured the landscape so that I can post it on my social media and I can at least gain some public attractions from my viewers.

✓ Yes, I always take pictures out of the car window, especially when I capture a nice landscape that I can post on my social media to attract viewers.

Multiple article and word-choice errors: 'a pictures' should be 'pictures' or 'a picture'; 'click' is informal—use 'take'; 'from the car windows' -> 'out of the car window' (singular fits context); remove duplicated 'especially' and correct sentence flow. 'Gain some public attractions from my viewers' is unnatural; use 'attract viewers' instead.

× I prefer mountain because my country is covered with full of mountains so I love watching the Green Mountains.

✓ I prefer the mountains because my country is full of mountains, so I love seeing the green mountains.

'I prefer mountain' should be plural 'the mountains' when contrasting mountains vs sea. 'Covered with full of mountains' is ungrammatical; use 'full of mountains' or 'covered with mountains'. Capitalization of 'Green' is unnecessary unless a proper name; use lowercase 'green' unless it is a specific name.

× Whenever I watch mountains it remind me of my home country so that's why I live the scene and the landscape of the mountains.

✓ Whenever I see mountains, they remind me of my home country, so that's why I love the scenery and landscape of the mountains.

Subject-verb agreement and verb choice issues: 'it remind' should be 'they remind' because 'mountains' is plural. 'Watch mountains' is odd — use 'see mountains'. 'I live the scene' is incorrect; should be 'I love the scenery'. Ensure commas to separate clauses for clarity.