旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (e.g., "listening to music"), and avoid irrelevant words like "Arted." Add one brief reason or a short example using a linking word (e.g., "because" or "so") and keep it to no more than 3–4 sentences.

範例: No, I usually don't look out the window when I travel by bus or car because I often fall asleep while listening to music. As a result, I prefer to rest and recharge during the journey rather than watch the scenery.

建議: Improve vocabulary accuracy and grammar, and be specific. Begin with a direct topic sentence using a linking word (e.g., "Sometimes"). Correct nouns ("sunrise, sunset, or a rainbow") and replace unclear words ("Burrows") with "photos" or "pictures." Add a brief reason why you save them and keep the answer within 2–3 sentences.

範例: Sometimes. When I see a beautiful sky — for example a sunrise, sunset, or a rainbow — I often take photos from the car window to save the memory and share them with family.

建議: Make the response grammatically correct and more specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct singular/plural forms ("sounds of the waves"), and a linking word ("because"). Provide a short reason and a simple comparison phrase ("more peaceful than the mountains"). Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

範例: I prefer the sea because I enjoy the sound of the waves, which helps me relax. The coastal atmosphere feels more peaceful to me than the mountains.

× No, I don't look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car because I usually fall asleep while listening music and also I just want to be relaxed and rest. Arted.

✓ No, I don't look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car, because I usually fall asleep while listening to music and I just want to relax and rest.

Error type 8: 'listening' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by a noun (listen to music). Also 'be relaxed' is awkward here; use the verb 'relax' for parallel structure with 'rest'. Suggestion: use 'listening to music' and 'want to relax' to make the sentence grammatically correct and natural. Grammar problem type ID:8

× It depends on my mood. Sometimes when I admire a beautiful sky such as sunrise, sunsets or rainbow, I usually take some of Burrows to save as the memories.

✓ It depends on my mood. Sometimes when I admire a beautiful sky, such as a sunrise, a sunset, or a rainbow, I usually take some photos to save as memories.

Error type 13: incorrect word choice and pluralization. 'Sunrise, sunsets or rainbow' needs consistent articles and plural forms; use 'a sunrise, a sunset, or a rainbow'. 'Burrows' is incorrect word; likely intended 'photos'. 'Take some photos to save as memories' is the correct phrase. Also drop 'the' before 'memories'. Grammar problem type ID:13

× I do prefer the sea because I like to listen the sounds of wave. The sea gives me a more peaceful rather than the mountains.

✓ I prefer the sea because I like to listen to the sound of the waves. The sea makes me feel more peaceful than the mountains.

Error type 6: tense and verb form issues and comparison structure. Use 'prefer' rather than 'do prefer' unless for emphasis. 'Listen to the sound of the waves' requires 'to' and plural 'waves' or 'the sound of waves'. The second sentence used 'gives me a more peaceful rather than the mountains' which is ungrammatical; use 'makes me feel more peaceful than the mountains' to form a correct comparison. Grammar problem type ID:6