旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Mejora la naturalidad y la estructura: comienza con una oración temática clara, evita frases redundantes y corrige pequeños errores gramaticales. Usa conectores breves para enlazar ideas y añade un detalle específico (por ejemplo, qué tipo de paisaje te gusta ver) para enriquecer la respuesta. Mantén máximo cinco oraciones.

範例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. I find it relaxes me and helps pass the time without using my phone, which can make me feel dizzy. Moreover, I enjoy spotting changing landscapes, such as rice fields and small villages, because they show local life. For these reasons, window-watching is my favourite way to travel.

建議: Corrige la gramática y haz la respuesta más fluida: usa tiempo verbal consistente y un conector para explicar la condición. Añade un ejemplo específico de un motivo para tomar la foto o una escena que recuerdas para ser más concreto. Limita a máximo cinco oraciones.

範例: Yes, I often take photos from the car window when I visit new places because some views are unique. For example, I once captured a striking terraced field and farmers working, which showed local lifestyle. However, if the window is too dirty or there is a lot of reflection, I usually don’t take pictures.

建議: Mejora la precisión gramatical y la coherencia: comienza con una clara oración temática, usa conectores para contrastar y evita repeticiones. Añade detalles específicos sobre qué aspectos del mar te gustan (sonidos, actividades) para enriquecer la respuesta y mantenerla breve.

範例: I prefer the sea because I find beaches more relaxing than mountain hikes. For example, I enjoy listening to the waves and walking on the sand when the sun is gentle and there is a light breeze. My family feels the same, so we often choose beach holidays for relaxation.

× Yes I do, I find a look out of the window is a good way to kill time and relax instead of playing mobile phones which can make you feel sick.

✓ Yes, I do. I find that looking out of the window is a good way to kill time and relax instead of playing on mobile phones, which can make you feel sick.

The phrase 'a look out of the window' is incorrect; after verbs like 'find' we often use a noun clause with a gerund: 'that looking out of the window...' Also 'playing mobile phones' should be 'playing on mobile phones' to show use of the device. Use commas to separate clauses for clarity.

× Also looking out of the window may bring you some new feeling and to make you see some new landscapes.

✓ Also, looking out of the window may give you new feelings and let you see new landscapes.

Mixing gerund phrases and infinitives ('may bring you some new feeling and to make you see') is incorrect. Parallel structure is needed: use verbs in the same form after 'may' (e.g., 'may give' and 'let you see'). 'Some new feeling' should be plural or uncountable: 'new feelings' or 'a new feeling' depending on meaning.

× Yes, I often take photos from the car window when I visit some new places.

✓ Yes, I often take photos from the car window when I visit new places.

'Some new places' is not wrong, but 'new places' is more natural in this context. No article is needed before 'new places' when speaking generally.

× I took that photos for those special and striking landscapes and local lifestyles.

✓ I took those photos of the special and striking landscapes and local lifestyles.

'That photos' mixes singular demonstrative 'that' with plural 'photos'; it should be 'those photos'. Also use 'of' to indicate what the photos are depicting, and 'the' is natural before 'special and striking landscapes and local lifestyles' to refer to specific things seen.

× But if the window is too dirty, I won't take photos.

✓ But if the window is too dirty, I won't take photos.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. It uses first conditional appropriately to show a future decision dependent on a present condition.

× I prefer sea because I think climbing mountains is tiring.

✓ I prefer the sea because I think climbing mountains is tiring.

When speaking about the sea in a general sense, use the definite article 'the sea'. 'Prefer sea' without an article is incorrect in English.

× Instead go to beach can make me feel peaceful and relax, especially when the sunshine is not too strong and it has little breeze.

✓ Instead, going to the beach can make me feel peaceful and relaxed, especially when the sun is not too strong and there is a gentle breeze.

The original mixes forms; 'Instead go to beach' is ungrammatical. Use a gerund phrase 'going to the beach' as the subject. 'Relax' should be the adjective 'relaxed' after 'feel'. 'The sunshine' is better as 'the sun' and 'it has little breeze' should be 'there is a gentle breeze' for natural expression.

× My family also enjoy that too.

✓ My family also enjoy that.

'Also' and 'too' are redundant together; remove one. In British English 'family' can take plural verb 'enjoy'; in American English use 'enjoy' with plural sense or 'enjoys' if treating family as singular. Here 'enjoy' is acceptable. Remove redundancy for clarity.