旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 表达要更自然、句子更简洁，并纠正词汇和语法错误。回答应先直接回应问题，然后用一两句具体细节支持。避免不相关或错误的短语（如“training ceremony”“view exposure”）。可用连接词使句子更连贯。

範例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by car because I enjoy seeing the countryside. For example, I like watching fields and rivers pass by, and sometimes I stop to take photos of interesting views to remember the trip.

建議: 注意时态和词序，避免重复表达（如“memories as beautiful memories”）。回答应更具体地描述动作与原因，并使用连接词使逻辑清晰。尽量把句子控制在2–4句内。

範例: Yes, I often take photos from the car window to save special moments. For instance, at sunset the light looks very peaceful, so I photograph it to remember the colours and the feeling of that evening.

建議: 回答要简明并避免语法混乱与重复（例如“the mountain is no mountain”“so freedom”）。给出直接立场句，然后用1–2句具体原因或描写支持（如气候、活动或感受），使用恰当词汇表达“自由”的感觉。

範例: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy the quiet and fresh air. Snowy peaks make me feel peaceful and free, and I like hiking there to relax and enjoy the views.

× I usually look out of the window when I travel by car because I enjoy watching the countryside and the training ceremony.

✓ I usually look out of the window when I travel by car because I enjoy watching the countryside and the train scenery.

句中“training ceremony”是错误的搭配，应为“train scenery”或更自然的“the scenery along the train”来表达“火车沿途的风景”。此外“look out of the window”可接受，但更常见的是“look out the window”。建议使用固定搭配并核对名词搭配。

× Sometimes I take photo in of interesting view exposure, mountains or rivers, which makes the journey more relaxing.

✓ Sometimes I take photos of interesting views, like mountains or rivers, which makes the journey more relaxing.

原句在名词和介词使用混乱：应使用复数“photos”表示多张照片，固定搭配为“take photos of”。“interesting view exposure”不通顺，应改为“interesting views”。建议记住固定短语“take photos of + 名词(复数或不定冠词)”。

× Yes, I often stacked the photos of secondary outside the car windows because I want to keep those memories as beautiful memories.

✓ Yes, I often stack photos taken from outside the car windows because I want to keep those memories.

原句动词时态与副词不一致：“often”通常与一般现在时连用，故应使用“stack”而不是过去式“stacked”。另外“photos of secondary”不通，改为“photos taken from outside the car windows”。“keep those memories as beautiful memories”冗余，简化为“keep those memories”。建议注意副词与时态的一致性，并避免冗余表达。

× For example, when I travel at sunset, the light is so peaceful that I like to capture it so can remember how it feel that the.

✓ For example, when I travel at sunset, the light is so peaceful that I like to capture it so I can remember how it feels.

原句缺少主语和助动词，且时态和语序错误。“so can remember how it feel that the”是碎片化的表达，需改为“so I can remember how it feels”。动词“feel”需加-s以与主语“it”一致。建议句子完整写出主语和助动词，注意主谓一致和句子连贯性。

× I prefer the mountains, but the mountain is no mountain.

✓ I prefer the mountains, but when there are no mountains nearby I don't mind.

原句“the mountain is no mountain”语法和表达都不正确。根据语境猜测想表达“没有山也可以”或“附近没有山时也无所谓”，需重构句子。原句缺少动词和正确结构。建议用清晰的从句表达条件或对比。

× I like the snow mountain because I think this is so freedom that can let me feel freedom.

✓ I like snowy mountains because I think they make me feel free.

“snow mountain”应改为复数或形容词形式“snowy mountains”或“snow-covered mountains”。“so freedom”不是合法表达，名词“freedom”不能直接与“so”连用表达“感觉自由”，应使用形容词“free”。句子也需注意代词与名词数一致（they 对应 mountains）。建议使用形容词形式并保持主谓一致。