旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid repeating phrases and filler sounds (uh, um).

範例: Yes, I do. I enjoy watching the landscape pass by because it lets me notice local architecture and everyday life in different places. For example, when I travelled to the countryside last year, I saw traditional houses and farmers working in the fields, which made the journey interesting.

建議: Reduce hesitation and correct minor grammar (picture→pictures, photo→photos). Give one specific example of when or what you photograph and why, using a linking word such as 'because' or 'for example'.

範例: Yes, I often take photos of scenery, especially in new places, because images help me remember details. For example, on a trip to the coast I photographed colorful fishing boats and the sunset so I could share them with friends and remember the mood.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and follow with two specific reasons connected by linking words (for example, because, and). Correct small errors (beside→besides, activity→activities). Eliminate filler words.

範例: I prefer the sea because I love the sense of open space and the fresh ocean air. Besides, beaches offer many outdoor activities, such as swimming and beach volleyball, which create a lively and energetic atmosphere that I enjoy.

× I usually enjoy looking out the window when I'm travelling.

✓ I usually enjoy looking out the window when I travel.

Use simple present (travel) for habitual actions. 'I'm travelling' (present continuous) suggests an action happening right now; for routines, simple present is more appropriate.

× See anything you see is a good opportunity to observe the scenery and see different places along the way.

✓ Seeing anything is a good opportunity to observe the scenery and notice different places along the way.

Sentence lacked proper structure and repeated 'see'. Begin with the gerund 'Seeing' to make a noun phrase subject, and replace the second 'see' with 'notice' to avoid repetition and improve clarity.

× I enjoy taking picture of scenery, uh, especially when I visit new places.

✓ I enjoy taking pictures of the scenery, especially when I visit new places.

Use plural 'pictures' for countable items and include the definite article 'the' before 'scenery' when referring to specific scenery seen while travelling.

× I think photo are the great way to preserve memory and share beautiful views with my friends on social media.

✓ I think photos are a great way to preserve memories and share beautiful views with my friends on social media.

Use plural 'photos' to match plural verb 'are'; remove extra 'the' and use 'a great way' (singular) requires singular subject, so better to say 'photos are a great way'. Also 'memory' should be plural 'memories' for general sense.

× Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?

✓ Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?

No correction needed; preposition use is correct. (Included to indicate this sentence contains no grammar errors.)

× Beside that, uh, beaches often have many outdoor activity and I really enjoy that energetic atmosphere.

✓ Besides that, beaches often have many outdoor activities, and I really enjoy that energetic atmosphere.

Use 'Besides' (not 'Beside') for 'in addition'. 'Activity' should be plural 'activities'. Add a comma and conjunction 'and' to join clauses correctly and remove filler 'uh'.