旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Fix subject-verb agreement and word choice (e.g. "makes me feel" not "makes me feels"). Avoid fragments like "Honestly, those beautiful scenarios." Instead describe what you find calming (trees, buildings, people).

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by car or bus because watching the scenery makes me feel calm. For example, I enjoy seeing green fields and old houses pass by; their steady pace helps me relax during long journeys.

建議: Give a direct answer and complete the sentence with a reason. Remove repeated words and correct grammar ("I'll" repeated, "take pictures" not "take a pictures"). Use linking words to connect mood and reason (e.g. "if... then..."). Provide one clear example of what you photograph.

範例: Sometimes I take pictures from the window, depending on my mood; if I see an interesting sunset or a pretty countryside road, I'll take a photo to remember it.

建議: Answer directly and give clear, relevant reasons. Avoid irrelevant points (colour preference is unclear) and correct grammar. Use linking words ("because", "also") but ensure the reasons are specific: activities, climate, scenery, or mood. Limit to two supporting details.

範例: I prefer the mountains because I like the cool weather and outdoor activities like hiking and picnics. Also, the quiet atmosphere there makes it easier to relax and spend time with friends.

× Definitely, I look outside the window when I'm inside the car or bus because it makes me feels really calm and peaceful.

✓ Definitely, I look out the window when I'm in the car or bus because it makes me feel really calm and peaceful.

Errors: 'look outside the window' is correct but 'look out the window' is more natural; 'I'm inside the car' -> 'I'm in the car' is more idiomatic. 'It makes me feels' uses an incorrect verb form: after 'makes' the verb should be base form 'feel' not 'feels'. Also removed extra word 'outside' repetition. Suggestion: Use the base form after causative verbs like 'make' and prefer 'in the car/bus' for idiomatic English. Grammar problem type ID:2

× Honestly, those beautiful scenarios.

✓ Honestly, those are beautiful scenes.

This was a fragment lacking a verb. 'Scenarios' is the wrong noun: 'scenes' or 'views' is more appropriate for what you see outside a window. The corrected sentence includes the verb 'are' to form a complete sentence. Suggestion: Always include a main verb and choose the correct noun for context. Grammar problem type ID:23

× Depending on my mood I'll I'll do take a pictures of those still and roads and countryside scenery because it has.

✓ Depending on my mood, I'll take pictures of the still roads and countryside scenery because I like them.

Errors: duplicate 'I'll I'll' (typo), incorrect verb sequence 'do take a pictures' — use 'take pictures' (no article before plural 'pictures'), and the clause 'because it has' is incomplete and unclear. Changed to 'because I like them' to express reason. Suggestions: Remove repeated words, use correct verb forms and articles ('pictures' not 'a pictures'), and ensure reason clauses are complete and refer to a clear subject. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I usually prefer the mountains because my favorite color is white, so do mountain too.

✓ I usually prefer the mountains because my favorite color is white, so I like mountains too.

Errors: 'so do mountain too' is ungrammatical. 'Do' auxiliary with inversion is incorrect here; 'mountain' should be plural 'mountains' and the subject 'I' is needed. Corrected to 'I like mountains too.' Suggestion: Use a clear subject and correct noun number when making additional statements. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Also it has a lot of cold places to hang out with our friends and be the one where I can get a lot of things.

✓ Also, there are many cold places to hang out with friends, and it's a place where I can do many activities.

Errors: 'it has a lot of cold places' is awkward and uses 'it' unclearly; use existential 'there are' for existence. 'Our friends' should be 'friends' to match speaker perspective. 'Be the one where I can get a lot of things' is vague and ungrammatical; replaced with 'it's a place where I can do many activities.' Suggestion: Use 'there is/there are' to introduce existence, keep pronouns consistent with speaker perspective, and replace vague expressions with specific verbs. Grammar problem type ID:11}]}