旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 문법과 문장구조를 개선하세요. 현재 문장은 시제와 형태(When I traveling → When I travel) 오류가 있고, 표현이 중복됩니다(look at the view of scenery / I can see a lot of landscape / there's culture view). 더 자연스럽게 주제를 명확히 한 뒤, 하나 혹은 두 개의 구체적 세부사항을 연결어로 덧붙이세요. 예: 주제문 + 이유(구체적 장면) + 연결어 사용.

範例: Yes, I do. When I travel by car or bus, I usually look out of the window because I enjoy seeing different landscapes, such as rice fields and small towns. Also, I like observing local architecture and people going about their daily lives.

建議: 문법과 표현을 명확히 하세요. 'viewing'의 형태 오류와 어색한 연결이 있습니다. 사진을 찍는 이유와 어떤 장면을 찍는지 구체적으로 설명하고, 연결어를 사용해 문장을 자연스럽게 이어가세요.

範例: Yes, I do. I often take photos from the car window, especially of interesting buildings or landscapes. For example, I like to capture old temples or colorful markets because they show local culture.

建議: 질문에 직접 답하고 이유를 명확히 제시하세요. 현재 문장은 'Yes'가 불필요하며, 단어 선택과 철자(‘Hyundai’와 ‘hound’ 등) 및 문장 연결에 문제가 있습니다. 먼저 선호(예: I prefer the mountains)를 말한 뒤, 이유와 구체적 예(휴가 때 무엇을 하는지)를 1~2문장으로 덧붙이세요.

範例: I prefer the mountains. I enjoy hiking and the fresh air, which helps me relax, while I usually visit the beach in summer to swim and sunbathe because I live near the coast.

× Yes, I do when I travel. When I traveling, I always look at the view of scenery because I can see a lot of landscape and there's culture view.

✓ Yes, I do when I travel. When I travel, I always look at the scenery because I can see a lot of landscapes and cultural views.

The original contains a present tense form error 'When I traveling' — it should be 'When I travel' (base verb for present simple). 'the view of scenery' is unnatural; use 'the scenery'. 'landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' to match 'a lot of'. 'there's culture view' is ungrammatical; use 'cultural views' as a plural noun phrase. Suggestion: use simple present with base verb for habitual actions and use correct noun forms and pluralization.

× Yes I do. When I go somewhere I always take a photo and viewing some cultural landmarks.

✓ Yes, I do. When I go somewhere I always take photos and view some cultural landmarks.

The clause incorrectly uses the gerund 'viewing' after the conjunction 'and' where a parallel verb is needed; use the base verb 'view' to match 'take photos'. Also 'take a photo' is better as plural 'take photos' for habitual action. Suggestion: maintain parallel structure (use two base verbs) and match number for habitual activities.

× Yes I prefer the mountain or fancy because I live in Hyundai and Hyundai has hound beaches so I always. Go to swim in ocean in summer.

✓ Yes, I prefer the mountains or the sea because I live in Hyundai and Hyundai has found beaches, so I always go swimming in the ocean in summer.

Multiple issues: 'the mountain or fancy' is unclear — likely meant 'the mountains or the sea'; use plural 'mountains' and include article 'the'. 'fancy' is incorrect word choice. 'hound beaches' seems misspelled; assumed 'found beaches' or 'good beaches' — corrected to 'found beaches' as minimal change, but preferably 'good beaches'. Sentence splitting error: 'so I always. Go to swim' should be 'so I always go swimming'. Use gerund 'go swimming' or 'swim' after 'go'. Also 'in ocean' needs definite article 'the ocean'. Suggestion: choose correct nouns, correct spelling, use 'go swimming' for habitual activity, and include 'the' before 'ocean'.