旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid unclear phrases like "by some transports" and verb tense errors. Also keep answers under five sentences.

範例: Yes, I always look out the window when I travel by bus or car. I enjoy watching the countryside and farmland because the peaceful scenery helps me relax. For example, I like seeing small villages and patchwork fields as they pass by.

建議: Use simple clear sentences and correct vocabulary. Say why and give a specific example. Avoid awkward literal translations (e.g. "record...by my smartphones"). Keep tense and word choice natural.

範例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery with my smartphone or camera. I do this to capture charming moments, for example, when golden sunlight falls on the fields, so I can look back at them later.

建議: Answer directly and use correct expressions for preference. Give clear reasons and a specific example. Fix grammar (e.g. "I prefer the sea because..."). Avoid vague phrases like "listening the thought of the view."

範例: I prefer the sea because I find it peaceful and beautiful. For instance, I enjoy swimming and snorkeling to see fish and dolphins up close, which makes beach holidays more exciting.

× Absolutely yes. I really enjoy looking outside the world by some when I was by some transports.

✓ Absolutely yes. I really enjoy looking out at the world when I am in some forms of transport.

The original mixes past and present ('enjoy' present with 'was' past) and uses incorrect prepositions/phrases ('looking outside the world by some', 'by some transports'). Use present continuous/ simple present consistent with habitual action: 'enjoy looking out at the world when I am in some forms of transport.' Also replace 'by' with 'in' for vehicles and use 'forms of transport' for clarity.

× The reason is that I could see the countryside, farmland which could give me a real sense of peace for example.

✓ The reason is that I can see the countryside and farmland, which give me a real sense of peace, for example.

Incorrect modal 'could' suggests conditional or past; present habitual action requires 'can' or simple present. Also missing comma before the nonrestrictive clause and awkward word order. Use 'and' to join nouns and 'which give' (plural agreement) to match 'countryside and farmland.' Add commas around the example phrase.

× I especially like watching the fields and small villages.

✓ I especially like watching the fields and small villages.

This sentence is grammatically correct in present tense and needs no change. It is retained as-is to match the habitual preference.

× Absolutely yes, I frequently record this beautiful scenery by my smartphones or my camera.

✓ Absolutely yes, I frequently photograph this beautiful scenery with my smartphone or my camera.

Use 'photograph' or 'take photos of' instead of 'record' for still scenery; use 'with' not 'by' to indicate the instrument. Use singular 'smartphone' unless the speaker has multiple; 'my smartphone or my camera' is idiomatic.

× The reason that I could use the two frozen some charming time and I also consume my little time on it when I in the.

✓ The reason is that I can capture those charming moments, and I also spend a little time doing it when I am travelling.

Original is ungrammatical and unclear: 'could use the two frozen some charming time' and 'consume my little time on it when I in the.' Replace with clear present-tense expressions: 'can capture those charming moments' (use capture for photos), 'spend a little time doing it' (correct verb and phrase), and 'when I am travelling' (complete the clause and correct preposition/verb).

× Will I? I'll give more love on the sea 'cause I think it's very significant and splendid.

✓ Me? I prefer the sea because I think it's very beautiful and impressive.

'Will I?' is unnatural as a response; use 'Me?' or 'I would say' to respond. 'I'll give more love on the sea' is non-idiomatic. Use 'prefer the sea' for preference. 'Significant and splendid' are odd collocations for scenery; 'beautiful and impressive' are more natural. Also use 'because' instead of informal ''cause' in formal speech.

× I really enjoy listening the thought of the view and I really like to dive in under the sea surface 'cause I could interact with the cute creatures such as dolphin and.

✓ I really enjoy thinking about the view, and I also like diving below the sea surface because I can interact with cute creatures such as dolphins.

'Enjoy listening the thought of the view' is incorrect; 'enjoy thinking about the view' or 'enjoy looking at the view' are appropriate. Use gerund 'diving' after 'like' or 'I also like to dive' (both acceptable); 'below the sea surface' or 'under the sea surface' — 'below' is more natural. Replace 'could' with 'can' for general ability. Pluralize 'dolphin' to 'dolphins' and finish the list properly.