旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Fluency is understandable but filled with hesitation and small errors. Reduce filler words (uh), correct vocabulary (“bus or car” rather than “bus of worker”), and tighten sentences to be more natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, “because” or “which”). Keep it under five sentences.

範例: Yes, I often look out the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching the countryside. For example, seeing green fields and trees helps me relax, and I often notice small details like farmers working or birds flying, which makes the journey more pleasant.

建議: The answer conveys the main idea but has repetition, hesitations and an incomplete final sentence. Remove fillers, avoid repeating words (photos and video), and finish your thought. Use a linking word to connect reason and effect (for example, “because” or “so”), and provide one specific example of what you capture.

範例: Yes, I often take photos and short videos of the view outside the window because they help me preserve memories of trips. For instance, I usually photograph interesting landscapes or sunsets so I can look back at them later and feel relaxed.

建議: Grammar and pronunciation errors reduce clarity (e.g. “a sea,” “in on in,” “who is has a breathtaking few”). Use correct noun forms (“the sea” or “the seaside/beach”), keep sentences concise, and add a specific reason or example. Use linking words like “because” and “for example” to organize your answer.

範例: I prefer the sea because the beach offers fresh air and relaxing walks with family or friends. For example, I love watching the sunrise and sunset over the water, which creates a breathtaking view and helps me unwind.

× I look out uh, the window at the scenery when travelling by bus of worker, uh, because, uh, I love to see the beautiful nature and enjoy the fresh, uh, year.

✓ I look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car because I love to see the beautiful nature and enjoy the fresh air.

The phrase 'by bus of worker' is incorrect preposition/word choice; 'or car' makes sense for the question. 'Year' is a wrong word; context requires 'air'. Remove filler sounds (uh) and extra commas. Use 'by bus or car' to indicate mode of travel and 'fresh air' for the sensory experience.

× Uh, it gives me a sense of relaxation and uh, peacefulness.

✓ It gives me a sense of relaxation and peace.

'Peacefulness' is a noun but sounds awkward here; 'peace' is the more natural noun to pair with 'a sense of'. Remove filler words. Maintain concise parallel noun phrase 'relaxation and peace'.

× Yes, so I take photos and short videos, the scenery outside of the car window, uh, I believe uh photos and video uh, can help to preserve memory.

✓ Yes, I take photos and short videos of the scenery outside the car window. I believe photos and videos can help to preserve memories.

Use 'of' to indicate what you take photos/videos of. Remove unnecessary commas and fillers. 'Video' should be plural to match 'photos' and 'memories' is the correct plural noun. Split into two sentences for clarity.

× When I see the beautiful uh video, I feel very relaxed and.

✓ When I see the beautiful videos, I feel very relaxed.

The sentence ended abruptly with 'and.' Remove the conjunction and use plural 'videos' to match earlier reference. Avoid filler sounds and ensure the sentence has a complete predicate.

× I prefer a sea because I think in on in the sea beach we can enjoy fresh air walking along with a family or friends.

✓ I prefer the sea because I think on the beach we can enjoy fresh air while walking with family or friends.

Use definite article 'the sea' when speaking generally about sea as a preference. Replace 'in on in the sea beach' with 'on the beach'. Use 'while' to connect simultaneous actions and remove extra articles before 'family'.

× We can enjoy the sunset and sunrise which is a who is has a breathtaking few.

✓ We can enjoy the sunset and sunrise, which are breathtaking to see.

The relative clause had multiple errors: 'which is' should agree in number with 'sunset and sunrise' so use 'which are'. Phrases 'a who is has' are incorrect; replace with 'breathtaking to see' or 'a breathtaking view'. Also 'few' is a wrong word; correct is 'view'.