旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be careful with grammar and word choice, and make your answer more concise and coherent. Begin with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and articles (e.g., “when I’m travelling”), avoid unclear words like “a few” and “pitch,” and limit fillers. Use one or two supporting details linked by a connector (e.g., “because” or “so”) and keep it under five sentences.

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy seeing the countryside. For example, the green fields and small villages are very peaceful, and they help me relax during the journey, so I always try to sit next to the window.

建議: Reduce hesitation sounds, correct verb forms, and choose accurate vocabulary. Start with a direct answer, then give a reason and an example. Use linking words like “especially” and “because” correctly and avoid vague words such as “fuse.” Keep sentences clear and concise.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos and short videos from the car window, especially when we pass through the countryside because the scenery is calming. For instance, I often record the fields and rivers and watch the videos later to remember the trip.

建議: Answer directly and use clear vocabulary for the place (e.g., “the sea” or “the beach”), avoid fillers, and organize reasons with linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example”). Limit to two or three concise sentences with specific details (activities or feelings).

範例: I prefer the sea because I can spend time with family and friends and enjoy watching the sunrise and sunset together. For example, we often walk along the beach, breathe the fresh air, and relax while listening to the waves.

× Yes, I often look out the window at the scenery when I traveling.

✓ Yes, I often look out the window at the scenery when I travel.

The sentence uses 'traveling' after 'I' where the base present tense verb 'travel' is required. This is a present tense issue: after subject 'I' the simple present 'travel' should be used to express habitual action. Suggestion: use 'I travel' for routines, or 'I am traveling' for current actions.

× I enjoy the fresh air and the countryside a few which is very beautiful and it give me a sense of relax and pitch.

✓ I enjoy the fresh air and the countryside, which is very beautiful, and it gives me a sense of relaxation and peace.

Multiple problems: incorrect adjective/adverb forms and word choice. 'a few' is incorrect here; 'which' should refer to 'the countryside' with a comma. 'give' should be 'gives' to agree with singular subject 'it'. 'relax' is a verb; the noun 'relaxation' is needed, and 'pitch' is incorrect word choice; 'peace' fits context. Suggestion: use correct noun forms and subject-verb agreement, and choose appropriate vocabulary.

× When I travel I always try to sit in window.

✓ When I travel, I always try to sit by the window.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect with 'window'; the correct preposition is 'by' or 'at' to indicate seat next to the window. Also add a comma after the introductory clause. Suggestion: use 'sit by the window' for clarity.

× Uh, yes, uh, I enjoying taking photos and short videos outside the car window.

✓ Uh, yes, I enjoy taking photos and short videos out of the car window.

'I enjoying' is incorrect; the simple present 'I enjoy' is required to describe a habitual action. Alternatively, 'I'm enjoying' would be used for ongoing action. Also 'outside the car window' is better phrased as 'out of the car window.' Suggestion: use 'I enjoy' for routines.

× Uh, especially if it's a countryside because the fuse are relaxing and help me feel calm.

✓ Especially if it's the countryside, because the views are relaxing and help me feel calm.

'a countryside' and 'it's a countryside' are incorrect; use 'the countryside' or just 'countryside'. 'fuse' is a misspelling of 'views'. 'are' is correct for plural 'views'. This is mainly adjective/word choice and article use. Suggestion: use 'the countryside' and correct noun 'views'.

× Uh, I also love to uh, see the videos later.

✓ I also love to watch the videos later.

'see the videos' is understandable but 'watch the videos' is the correct collocation in English. This is a pronoun/verb choice issue: 'to see' is less appropriate for intentionally viewing videos. Suggestion: use 'watch' with video content.

× I prefer enjoying on CBS, uh, because uh, uh, we can spend time with family and uh, friends, uh, we can see sunset and sunrise together and, uh, enjoy the breathtaking feel.

✓ I prefer enjoying the sea, because we can spend time with family and friends, see the sunset and sunrise together, and enjoy the breathtaking views.

Several errors: 'CBS' seems to be a typo for 'sea' or 'beach'; 'on CBS' is incorrect. 'the sunset' and 'the sunrise' need definite article 'the'. 'breathtaking feel' is awkward; 'breathtaking views' is natural. This falls under article errors and incorrect use of adjectives/word choice. Suggestion: correct word choice to 'the sea' or 'the beach', add articles 'the' before 'sunset' and 'sunrise', and use 'views' instead of 'feel'.

× Uh, you also, uh, can enjoy fresh air.

✓ You can also enjoy the fresh air.

Word order and article missing: 'also' is better placed after the subject verb or between auxiliary and main verb ('can also enjoy'), and 'fresh air' usually takes 'the' when referring to specific fresh air in that place. This is a pronoun/word-order and article usage issue. Suggestion: use 'You can also enjoy the fresh air.'