旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct basic grammar. Begin with a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitations, correct verb forms and word choice (e.g. "gives" not "give", "relaxed" instead of "relax"). Use one linking phrase to add a specific detail (e.g. "because", "when"). Keep within 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes. I often look out of the window when I travel by bus because watching the scenery relaxes me and helps me feel calm. For example, seeing trees and people going about their day makes me forget my worries.

建議: Correct tense and word forms and avoid fillers. Start with a direct statement, then give a concise reason and one specific example. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas. Aim for 2–3 sentences and correct the gerund/infinitive forms ("I always take photos").

範例: Yes, I do. I always take photos and short videos because they help me preserve memories of trips. For instance, I recently filmed the countryside passing by to remember a family outing.

建議: Give a clear, correctly phrased preference and support it with two specific reasons linked smoothly. Correct vocabulary (use "the sea" or "the beach", not "CBS") and grammar ("I prefer the sea because...", "we can see the sunrise and sunset"). Avoid repetition and hesitation. Keep to 2–3 well-structured sentences.

範例: I prefer the sea because I enjoy spending quality time with family on the beach. We can watch beautiful sunrises and sunsets, breathe fresh air, and relax while listening to the waves.

× Yes uh I enjoy taking photos and short videos of the scenery. I believe photos and videos help to preserve memory. Uh, so I always taking photo and short videos out with the beautiful scenery when I travel uh, in uh.

✓ Yes, I enjoy taking photos and short videos of the scenery. I believe photos and videos help to preserve memories. So I always take photos and short videos of the beautiful scenery when I travel.

Error: incorrect verb form 'always taking' should be the base form with auxiliary 'do' or simple present 'always take'; also 'photo' should be plural 'photos' to match 'short videos' and 'memory' should be plural 'memories'. Suggestion: use the simple present for habitual actions: 'I always take photos'. Ensure nouns agree in number.

× Yes, I often look out the window and I enjoy watching the dancing, uh, scenery, uh, when traveling by bus for car, it's give me a sense of relax and help me to feel uh, calm.

✓ Yes, I often look out the window and I enjoy watching the dancing scenery when traveling by bus or car; it gives me a sense of relaxation and helps me feel calm.

Errors: 'dancing, uh, scenery' is fine but commas unnecessary; 'for car' should be 'or car'; 'it's give' is wrong verb form and subject–verb agreement: should be 'it gives'; 'a sense of relax' uses incorrect noun form — 'relax' is a verb, use 'relaxation'; 'help me to feel' is grammatically acceptable but 'helps me feel' is more natural. Suggestion: correct conjunction 'or', use third-person singular verb 'gives' and 'helps', and use the noun 'relaxation'.

× Uh, when I see outside scenery, I forget my wall worries.

✓ When I see the scenery outside, I forget all my worries.

Errors: word order 'see outside scenery' is awkward — 'see the scenery outside' is natural; 'wall' is a typo for 'all'; pronoun/possessive placement 'my wall worries' should be 'all my worries'. Suggestion: place modifiers in correct order and correct typos.

× I believe photos and videos help to preserve memory.

✓ I believe photos and videos help to preserve memories.

Error: 'preserve memory' is uncountable here but more natural to use plural 'memories' when referring to personal recollections preserved by photos/videos. Suggestion: use 'memories' for multiple preserved recollections.

× I prefer CBS because I love to enjoy and I spend quality time with my family or friends in the sea beach, uh, we can see the sunset, sunrise, uh, great fresh air and the reflection of the sun on the sea.

✓ I prefer the sea because I enjoy spending quality time with my family or friends on the beach. We can see the sunrise and sunset, enjoy the fresh air, and see the reflection of the sun on the water.

Errors: 'CBS' is unclear — assumed 'sea'; 'love to enjoy and I spend' is ungrammatical; use gerund 'enjoy spending' for activities; 'sea beach' should be 'the beach' or 'seaside'; run-on sentence separated into two sentences; word order and list items improved ('sunrise and sunset', 'fresh air', 'reflection of the sun on the water'). Suggestion: use clear noun ('sea' or 'beach'), gerund for activities, and break long sentences into clearer clauses.