旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clear and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence answering the question, avoid hesitations and incorrect words, and give one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Use correct verbs and vocabulary (e.g., look, enjoy, watch) and keep responses under five sentences.

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. I enjoy watching passing buildings and trees because they help me relax, and sometimes I notice interesting signs or street scenes that I remember later.

建議: Answer directly and give specific reasons. Reduce fillers and repetition, use correct grammar (e.g., "sometimes I take photos") and linking words (e.g., "but", "because"). Clarify the contrast between taking photos and making videos with one clear supporting sentence.

範例: Sometimes I take photos if the view is impressive, but if the vehicle is moving fast I prefer to record a short video because it captures the scene better and is less likely to be blurry.

建議: Give a clear preference and explain with specific contrasts. Avoid mumbling and unclear words. Use linking phrases (e.g., "because", "on the other hand") correctly and provide one concrete reason or example for your choice.

範例: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy hiking and seeing different elevations and viewpoints. On the other hand, the sea is relaxing and beautiful at sunset, but I feel more energetic and inspired in mountainous landscapes.

× Yes, definitely umm, you know when I traveling uh by bus or car, I always lose cat the scenery uh that's all follow me.

✓ Yes, definitely. When I travel by bus or car, I always look at the scenery; it always follows me.

The sentence uses incorrect verb form 'traveling' after the subject 'I' where the simple present 'travel' is required for habitual actions. Also 'lose cat the scenery' is ungrammatical and likely intended as 'look at the scenery'. Use of simple present expresses regular habits. Suggestion: use 'I travel' for the verb and 'look at the scenery' to convey observing something regularly.

× I usually bathroom bathroom my window yeah it's very the opportunities.

✓ I usually look out of my window because it's a great opportunity.

The original repeats 'bathroom' which is incorrect and unclear. The phrase likely intended 'look out of my window'. The correct structure uses base verb 'look' not a noun. Also 'very the opportunities' is incorrect article and adjective usage; 'a great opportunity' is appropriate. Suggestion: replace repeated nonsense words with the verb phrase 'look out of' and use 'a' before singular countable noun 'great opportunity'.

× Uh, yeah, sometime I will uh, take photos when the scenery is fairly impressed me at at first, you know, but it depends on the speed of the car or the bus, you know.

✓ Uh, yeah, sometimes I will take photos when the scenery impresses me at first, but it depends on the speed of the car or the bus.

Use 'sometimes' (adverb) not 'sometime' for occasional actions. The clause 'the scenery is fairly impressed me' misuses passive and object; the scenery should be the subject that 'impresses me' (present simple). Also remove filler duplications. Suggestion: use 'sometimes' and change to active structure 'scenery impresses me'.

× And then beside that, it always made the video instead of taking photos.

✓ Besides that, I usually make a video instead of taking photos.

'It always made the video' uses past tense 'made' and wrong subject 'it'; the speaker should use simple present 'make' for habitual actions and subject 'I'. Use 'besides' or 'beside' corrected to 'Besides that' for transitions. Suggestion: use 'I usually make a video' to describe a habitual preference.

× Umm, actually, I uh, prefer to see, you know, the mountains, umm collude or you can different, uh, the range of the height.

✓ Umm, actually, I prefer the mountains because you can see different ranges of height.

'Prefer to see' is wordy; 'prefer the mountains' is idiomatic. 'Collude' is incorrect word choice; likely 'because' or 'could' intended. 'You can different the range of the height' misorders words and lacks verbs; use 'you can see different ranges of height'. Present simple 'prefer' fits. Suggestion: use clear connector 'because' and the verb 'see' with noun phrase 'different ranges of height'.

× Yeah, uh, on the other hand is still you skin the, the, the, the, the sunsets.

✓ On the other hand, I also enjoy the sunsets.

The original is ungrammatical and contains repeated filler words and a nonsensical phrase 'you skin the sunsets'. The intended meaning seems to contrast preference and mention enjoying sunsets. Use a clear subject and verb: 'I also enjoy the sunsets.' Suggestion: remove fillers and use a simple clause to express contrast and preference.