旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and structured: start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then add one or two concise supporting details. Use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles) and avoid repetition. Use linking words like 'however' or 'also' when adding information.

範例: I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching the changing scenery. For example, on long journeys I like to watch villages and fields pass by, which helps me relax and pass the time.

建議: Answer directly and use simple, correct sentences. Avoid hesitation and repetition. Mention one clear reason and one brief example. Use past or present tense consistently.

範例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery from the car to capture memories. For instance, during a recent trip to the countryside I photographed fields and old houses, and later shared these pictures with my family.

建議: Give a clear preference in one sentence, then provide two specific reasons with correct grammar and logical linking words (because, so, for example). Avoid unclear phrases and irrelevant fragments.

範例: I prefer the mountains because their peaceful atmosphere helps me relax and clear my mind. For example, hiking in the mountains gives me fresh air and quiet surroundings, which is much better for resting than noisy beaches.

× Candidly speaking, it is depend upon the person's mood which he is most comfortable to travel if he likes the bus or car.

✓ Candidly speaking, it depends on a person's mood whether he prefers to travel by bus or by car.

The original sentence has sentence structure problems and incorrect verb form. 'It is depend' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'depends' (subject-verb agreement). Use 'depends on' rather than 'depend upon' in this context. Replace 'which he is most comfortable to travel if he likes the bus or car' with 'whether he prefers to travel by bus or by car' for clear, grammatical structure. Suggested improvement: use 'depends on' + noun phrase, use 'whether' for alternatives, and use 'prefer' with 'to travel by' + mode of transport.

× But both are the very good, very good vehicles and when we are travelling the different places we all having excitement to see the different views.

✓ But both are very good vehicles, and when we travel to different places we are all excited to see the different views.

Problems: redundant 'the very good, very good', incorrect progressive 'are travelling the different places' and wrong form 'we all having excitement'. Use 'very good vehicles' without repetition. Use simple present 'we travel' for habitual action. Say 'we are excited' or 'we get excited' instead of 'we all having excitement'. Suggested improvement: avoid repetition, use correct tense for habits (simple present), and use 'excited' as an adjective.

× Definitely I take the pictures outside here when I was traveling in the car, I take the I take the different difference of views to capture the my memories and I also take the pictures with my family and the more ever I also, uh, capture them all single moments in my camera and.

✓ Definitely I take pictures out of the car window when I am traveling; I take different views to capture my memories, and I also take pictures with my family. Moreover, I capture every single moment with my camera.

Issues: mixed tenses ('I take' with 'when I was traveling') and redundancy ('I take the I take', 'different difference', 'the my'). Use present simple or present continuous consistently for habitual actions: 'I take pictures when I am traveling' or 'I take pictures when I travel'. Remove redundant words, correct possessive 'my memories', and use 'every single moment'. Suggested improvement: choose and maintain correct tense for habitual actions and eliminate repeated words.

× To be honest, I prefer the most mountains because it's the views are a very amazing and relax my mind and I also very crazy to see them different mountains.

✓ To be honest, I mostly prefer the mountains because their views are amazing and they relax my mind; I am also very eager to see different mountains.

Problems: 'I prefer the most mountains' is ungrammatical; use 'I mostly prefer the mountains' or 'I prefer mountains the most'. 'it's the views are a very amazing' mixes pronouns and articles incorrectly; use 'their views are amazing'. 'relax my mind' needs plural subject agreement 'they relax my mind'. 'I also very crazy' is incorrect; use 'I am very eager' or 'I am crazy about seeing'. Suggested improvement: use correct expressions for preference ('prefer X the most' or 'mostly prefer X'), match pronouns to nouns, and use 'be' verbs with adjectives.

× I also when I was to see the mountain I feel very relaxed and my meditation all removed because of full of darkness.

✓ Also, when I saw the mountains I felt very relaxed and my thoughts quieted because it was calm and dark.

Issues: mixed and incorrect tense usage ('when I was to see' is wrong; use 'when I saw' or 'when I see'), inconsistent verb forms ('I feel' should be past 'I felt' if referring to a past event). 'my meditation all removed' is incorrect English; likely meant 'my thoughts quieted' or 'I felt like meditating'—here 'my thoughts quieted' is clearer. 'because of full of darkness' is ungrammatical; use 'because it was calm and dark' or 'because of the darkness'. Suggested improvement: choose correct past tense forms for past experiences, use natural English expressions for mental states (e.g., 'my thoughts quieted', 'I felt relaxed'), and correct prepositional phrases.

× Moreover, my family also.

✓ Moreover, my family does too.

This fragment lacks a verb and is incomplete. Add a verb to complete the sentence; 'my family does too' or 'my family enjoys it too' completes the idea. Suggested improvement: avoid sentence fragments; ensure each sentence has at least a subject and a verb.