旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 문법과 발음, 문장 구조를 더 자연스럽게 다듬으세요. 예를 들어 'when travel'는 시제·주어가 빠져 있어 자연스럽지 않습니다. 중복 표현('take videos'와 'too')을 피하고 연결어를 사용해 이유나 빈도를 설명하면 답변이 더 유창해 보입니다. 구체적으로는 간단한 주어-동사 일치, 시제 사용, 그리고 한두 개의 연결어(예: because, so, and)를 사용해 문장을 명확히 하세요.

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching the changing scenery. I often record short videos and upload them to Instagram to share the views with my friends.

建議: 반복되는 표현을 줄이고, 연결어와 구체적인 설명을 더하세요. 'like I said before' 같은 구어체는 짧은 시험 답변에서는 불필요할 수 있습니다. 또한 감정을 설명할 때 이유나 예시(어떤 장면이 인상적이었는지)를 덧붙이면 내용이 더 풍부해집니다. 불필요한 반복('love'와 'changing scenery')을 피하고 대체 어휘를 사용하세요.

範例: Yes, I often record videos rather than take photos because the scenery keeps changing rapidly. For example, I like capturing sunset views and passing fields because they feel cinematic and vivid.

建議: 문법(관사·동사 형태)과 명확한 이유 제시를 개선하세요. 'the mountain movement'는 어색하며, 'when the wind blowing'은 동사 형태가 빠졌습니다. 선호를 말할 때는 간단한 주제문 뒤에 이유를 한두 개 구체적으로 제시하고 연결어(if/so/because)를 사용하세요. 또한 불필요한 중복('I really love the mountain, mountains')을 피하세요.

範例: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy the rustling of trees and the fresh air when the wind blows. The calm atmosphere and scenic trails help me relax and think clearly.

× Yes, I do look out the window at the scenery when travel.

✓ Yes, I do look out the window at the scenery when I travel.

The sentence is missing the subject 'I' in the subordinate clause after 'when'. In English, adverbial clauses of time normally require an explicit subject if the clause has its own verb. Add 'I' to make the clause complete (when I travel). Also keep the present simple tense to match the habitual action.

× I also love to take videos of the scenery too and share it on my Instagram.

✓ I also love taking videos of the scenery and sharing them on my Instagram.

When describing likes with 'love', using the gerund (-ing) form is natural: 'love taking' and 'sharing'. Also avoid redundancy ('also' and 'too' together) and ensure pronoun number agreement: 'videos' requires 'them' rather than 'it'.

× Yes, uh, like I said before, I love filming the videos of the scenery because I really love the changing scenery.

✓ Yes, like I said before, I love filming the scenery because I really like the changing views.

Use 'filming the scenery' rather than 'filming the videos of the scenery' to avoid repetition and awkward phrasing. Use 'like' for variety instead of repeating 'love'. Also 'views' is a more natural plural noun for changing scenes; 'changing scenery' is okay but 'changing views' sounds more natural here.

× It feels like I'm in the middle of the movie.

✓ It feels like I'm in the middle of a movie.

Use the indefinite article 'a' before 'movie' because this is a general comparison, not a specific movie previously mentioned. The tense and structure are otherwise correct.

× I prefer watching the mountains because I really love the mountain, umm mountains movement when the wind blowing.

✓ I prefer watching the mountains because I really love the way the mountains move when the wind is blowing.

The original has awkward noun/adjective use ('the mountain, umm mountains movement') and a missing auxiliary verb in 'when the wind blowing'. Use 'the way the mountains move' to describe movement, and include the auxiliary 'is' in the progressive 'when the wind is blowing'. This corrects word choice and verb phrase structure.