旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally relevant and contains supporting details, but it is slightly wordy and has minor grammar and phrasing issues. Keep answers within 3–4 clear sentences, start with a direct topic sentence, and use linking words for clarity. Also correct small errors (e.g., say “when I travel” not “when I am traveling by looking at the window”; use “infrastructure” as uncountable). Try to add a concise reason or a short example to make it more specific.

範例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel. I enjoy noticing features along the route, such as signboards, shops and the different types of infrastructure. For example, on my last bus trip I watched people opening market stalls and noticed how the neighbourhood changed from residential to industrial.

建議: The main idea is clear, but the answer is awkwardly phrased and contains confusing details (e.g., “the boss might be shaking” and “fall outside”). Simplify your sentences, correct grammar, and give a clear, specific reason or short example. Use linking words like “because” or “so” to connect ideas coherently.

範例: No, I usually don’t take photos because I prefer to enjoy the view. Also, taking pictures in a moving vehicle can be risky — my phone could slip and get damaged. For instance, once I almost dropped my camera when the bus hit a bump.

建議: Your preference is clear and you give sensory details, which is good. However, avoid vague phrases like “rewinding time and.” Keep sentences complete, use precise vocabulary (e.g., “sea breeze,” “waves”), and add one brief reason or comparison. Use linking words such as “because” and “also” correctly.

範例: I prefer the sea because I love the cool sea breeze and the sound of the waves. It feels very refreshing and relaxing, especially after a busy week. Compared with the mountains, the seaside helps me unwind and clear my mind.

× Yes, I enjoy the view of places whenever I am traveling by looking at the window.

✓ Yes, I enjoy the view of places whenever I travel by looking out of the window.

Use simple present to describe habitual actions: 'I travel' (not 'I am traveling'). Also use the correct preposition 'out of' with 'look' when referring to a window. Remove progressive form to match habitual context. For improvement: use simple present for routines ('I travel', 'I look out of the window').

× Firstly I get to see signboards and also I notice the stores, the infrastructures that are along the road.

✓ Firstly, I get to see signboards and I also notice the stores and the infrastructure along the road.

Use 'infrastructure' as an uncountable noun (not 'the infrastructures'). Add commas for clarity and use parallel conjunction 'and' instead of a second comma. For improvement: treat 'infrastructure' as uncountable and keep list items parallel.

× I also get to see people moving along the street.

✓ I also see people walking along the street.

Prefer simple present 'I see' for habitual action. 'Moving along the street' is wordy; 'walking' is more natural. For improvement: use concise verbs for typical actions and simple present for habits.

× No, I prefer I just enjoy it and let the memory sink into my mind.

✓ No, I prefer to just enjoy it and let the memory sink into my mind.

Use the infinitive 'to enjoy' after 'prefer' when indicating a general preference. For improvement: after 'prefer' use 'to' + verb or 'rather' + base verb structure.

× Most often it is tempting because the boss might be shaking and your telephone can or your camera you have can accidentally fall outside.

✓ Most often it is risky because the bus might shake and your phone or camera could accidentally fall out.

Multiple issues: 'boss' is a wrong word; context requires 'bus'. Simplify modal verbs: use 'could' for possibility. 'Fall out' is the correct phrasal verb. Remove redundant phrasing ('your telephone can or your camera you have can'). For improvement: choose correct nouns for context, use a single modal for possibility, and use concise word order.

× So I avoid this accident.

✓ So I avoid such accidents.

Use plural 'accidents' to refer to the general possibility; 'this accident' implies a specific event. For improvement: use plural or uncountable forms when speaking generally.

× I would choose to say the sea because of the breeze that comes when the waves are blowing.

✓ I would choose the sea because of the breeze that comes when the waves are breaking.

'Choose to say' is awkward; say 'choose the sea'. 'Waves are blowing' is incorrect; waves 'break' or 'roll'. For improvement: use natural collocations ('waves are breaking', 'waves are rolling') and simpler verb phrases ('choose the sea').

× It's also refreshing when you sit by the seaside and you feel the sound of the water moving.

✓ It's also refreshing to sit by the seaside and hear the sound of the water moving.

Use infinitive 'to sit' to express general preference; 'you feel the sound' is unnatural — use 'hear the sound'. For improvement: use natural verbs for senses ('hear' for sound) and infinitive when describing general experiences.

× It's kind of a rewinding time and.

✓ It's kind of like rewinding time.

Original sentence is incomplete and ungrammatical. Use 'kind of like' to convey the simile and remove the trailing 'and'. For improvement: avoid trailing conjunctions and complete the comparison with proper phrasing.