旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, I I), correct grammar (e.g. "I spend a lot of time"), and limit to 3–4 sentences. Add one specific detail and a linking word to improve coherence.

範例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because it helps me relax. For example, I enjoy watching rolling hills and small villages pass by, which distracts me from motion sickness. Also, sometimes I use the scenery to plan photo stops later.

建議: Good enthusiasm and clear idea. Reduce repetition and improve sentence variety. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, "so" → "therefore"). Add one specific example of what you photograph and mention how you share it to add authenticity.

範例: Absolutely. I often photograph dramatic landscapes and interesting architecture from the car window because the light changes quickly. When the view is especially beautiful, I record a short video and later upload it to Instagram so my friends can see it.

建議: Clarify the word 'CBS' (probably 'the sea' or 'coast') and avoid hesitations. Begin with a direct statement of preference, then give two specific reasons with linking words (for example, "because" and "also"). Keep within 3–4 sentences and correct small grammatical issues (e.g. "I can try seafood").

範例: I prefer the sea because I love swimming and watching sunrises and sunsets over the water. Also, I enjoy trying fresh seafood and taking part in coastal activities like kayaking, which helps me relax while listening to the waves.

× Yes, I often look out the window, uh, at the landscape when travelling, especially by bus or car.

✓ Yes, I often look out the window at the landscape when travelling, especially by bus or car.

Remove the extra comma before 'at the landscape' and filler 'uh' is optional in speech; main issue is punctuation and fluency rather than tense. The present simple 'often look' correctly matches habitual action. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary pauses and commas in the middle of the phrase to keep the sentence natural.

× Uh, it helps me relax and avoid car sickness.

✓ It helps me relax and prevents me from getting car sick.

'Avoid car sickness' is not the most natural collocation in English. Use 'prevents me from getting car sick' or 'helps me avoid car sickness.' Also remove filler 'Uh'. Suggestion: use a clear verb phrase like 'prevents me from getting' or 'helps me avoid' to express prevention.

× I I was so past my time to looking out the scenery.

✓ I had so little time to look at the scenery.

Original sentence mixes incorrect tense and word forms. 'Was so past my time' is ungrammatical. Use past perfect/simple as appropriate: 'had so little time' (past) and the verb 'look' after 'to' should be base form, not -ing. Also use 'look at the scenery' not 'look out the scenery.' Suggestion: use 'had little time to look at' for correct verb form and preposition.

× Absolutely. I love capturing photos outside the car window.

✓ Absolutely. I love taking photos out of the car window.

'Capturing photos outside the car window' is understandable but wordy; 'taking photos out of the car window' is more idiomatic. 'Love' correctly expresses present preference. Suggestion: prefer idiomatic verbs like 'take' for photos and use 'out of' or 'from' the car window.

× Sometimes the scenery is too amazing so I capture the video or photos.

✓ Sometimes the scenery is so amazing that I record video or take photos.

Use 'so... that' to connect cause and effect. 'Capture the video or photos' is awkward; 'record video' or 'take photos' are natural collocations. Maintain present simple for habitual action. Suggestion: use 'so... that' and natural verbs 'record' and 'take'.

× I share it social media with my friends.

✓ I share it on social media with my friends.

Preposition 'on' is required with 'social media.' Also 'it' could be plural 'them' if referring to multiple photos/videos. Suggestion: use 'share it on social media' or 'share them on social media' depending on context.

× I prefer CBS because I love swimming and uh, enjoying watching the sunset and sunrise.

✓ I prefer CBS because I love swimming and enjoy watching the sunrise and sunset.

After 'love' the parallel verb should be base form 'enjoy,' not a gerund following 'uh,'. Also 'watching the sunset and sunrise' is fine but 'sunrise and sunset' is more natural order. Remove filler 'uh.' Suggestion: keep verbs parallel: 'love swimming and enjoy watching...'. 'CBS' assumed place name is fine.

× I can try seafood and lots of activities in CBS.

✓ I can try seafood and do lots of activities in CBS.

'Try seafood' is fine, but 'lots of activities' needs a verb like 'do' to be grammatical. Using 'do lots of activities' is natural. Suggestion: use an appropriate verb for activities, e.g., 'do' or 'take part in.'

× CBS uh, gives me a sense of relaxation and the sound of waves is amazing.

✓ CBS gives me a sense of relaxation, and the sound of the waves is amazing.

Remove filler 'uh.' Add 'the' before 'waves' to refer to the specific waves at the sea. The present simple 'gives' and 'is' correctly express general truths. Suggestion: include the definite article with a specific noun and use a comma before 'and' for clarity.