打字— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clear and natural: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid fillers and unclear phrases like "so mean," and give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Keep it within 2–4 sentences. For example, say you prefer handwriting because it feels more personal and shows effort, then add a brief example or effect.

範例: I prefer handwriting to typing because a handwritten note feels more personal and shows the writer’s effort. For example, when a friend writes me a letter, I can sense their personality in the handwriting, which makes the message more meaningful.

建議: Respond directly and concisely: begin with a clear topic sentence, remove filler words, and add one supporting detail using a linking word (e.g., "because" or "so"). Limit to 1–3 sentences and correct small grammar issues ("every day" vs "everyday").

範例: I type on a laptop every day because I don't own a desktop. As a result, I use my laptop for work, studies, and online communication.

建議: Improve coherence and clarity: start with a clear time statement, avoid repetition and vague phrases, and explain briefly why you learned at that age using linking words. Use correct grammar (e.g., "from a basic background"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and give a concise reason.

範例: I learned to type when I was 18 after I attended a computer course. Because I came from a basic family where computers were not common, I needed that course to acquire typing skills for work and studies.

建議: Be specific and structured: begin with a clear statement about current practice, avoid fillers, and give concrete methods and frequency using linking words (e.g., "by", "so"). Mention measurable activities (timed exercises, online lessons) and results. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

範例: I improve my typing by practicing every day using online typing exercises and timed tests. By practicing for 20–30 minutes daily and typing paragraphs on diverse topics, I increased my speed and reduced errors.

× it's so mean. It's so much mean to me.

✓ it's so meaningful. It means a lot to me.

The student used 'mean' incorrectly; 'mean' is typically an adjective meaning unkind, not appropriate for describing handwriting. 'So much mean' is ungrammatical. Use 'meaningful' to describe something that has emotional significance, or the phrase 'means a lot to me' to express personal value. Also 'so much' should not modify 'mean' here. Suggestion: replace 'so mean' with 'meaningful' or use the verb phrase 'means a lot to me' to convey emotion.

× I would say when I was like 18, I attended the computer course.

✓ I would say when I was about 18, I attended a computer course.

Article and word choice issue: use 'about' not 'like' in formal speech and 'a computer course' is correct instead of 'the computer course' unless a specific course was previously mentioned. 'Attended' is past tense and appropriate here. Suggestion: use 'about 18' and 'a computer course' for natural phrasing.

× most of the people like, you know, the basis family, you know, when a people comes from basic family don't know how to type.

✓ most people from basic families don't know how to type.

Several errors: 'most of the people' is better as 'most people'; 'the basis family' is incorrect and should be 'basic families'; 'a people comes' is ungrammatical—'people' is plural. Also the clause needs correct subject-verb agreement: 'don't know' matches 'most people.' Suggestion: simplify to 'most people from basic families don't know how to type.'

× So I had to attend that class. So that's how I.

✓ So I had to attend that class. That's how I learned.

The sentence 'That's how I.' is incomplete and lacks a main verb. Add 'learned' to complete the idea. Suggestion: finish the clause with an appropriate verb like 'learned' or 'got those skills.'

× Umm so I everyday use my laptop and type through it.

✓ I use my laptop every day and type on it.

Word order and preposition errors: 'everyday' as one word is an adjective meaning ordinary; use 'every day' as an adverb phrase. 'Type through it' is unnatural—use 'type on it.' Also present simple 'I use' is correct for habitual action. Suggestion: 'I use my laptop every day and type on it.'

× So like almost every day, umm, I need to practice how to type like a lot of paragraph and sentences.

✓ Almost every day, I practice typing many paragraphs and sentences.

Incorrect modal/auxiliary use: 'I need to practice' suggests obligation rather than routine; simple present 'I practice' suits improvement context. 'How to type' is unnecessary; use gerund 'typing.' 'A lot of paragraph and sentences' has quantifier and plural errors—use 'many paragraphs and sentences.' Suggestion: 'I practice typing many paragraphs and sentences almost every day.'

× So I'm so proficient at it.

✓ So now I'm quite proficient at it.

The original 'So I'm so proficient at it' is awkward; 'so' twice is redundant. Use 'now' to indicate result of practice and 'quite' or 'very' to modify 'proficient.' Suggestion: 'Now I'm quite proficient at it.'