打字— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce hesitation markers and redundancy, use a clear topic sentence then one or two concise supporting reasons with linking words. Focus on natural phrasing (e.g. "I'm a bit old-fashioned, so I prefer handwriting to typing") and avoid repeating the same idea.

範例: I prefer handwriting to typing because I find it helps me remember things better. For example, when I take notes by hand I can organise ideas more clearly, so I often choose a notebook rather than a laptop.

建議: Answer directly with a topic sentence then give one or two supporting details using linking words. Remove filler words and small talk. Use correct collocations (e.g. "I use both a desktop and a laptop") and avoid short fragmented sentences.

範例: I use both a desktop and a laptop every day. My company provides a desktop at work, which I use for office tasks, while I also use my own laptop at home for personal browsing and emails.

建議: Start with a clear time reference, then give concise supporting details. Avoid filler phrases and repetitive words. Use linking words like "when" and "so" correctly to make the answer coherent. Be specific about the skills learned.

範例: I learnt to type when I was in primary school. At that time our school taught basic computer lessons, including how to use Microsoft Office and touch-typing, which is where I picked up most of my skills.

建議: Give a direct plan with specific actions and timeline rather than vague statements. Use precise linking words and avoid excessive hesitation. For example, mention particular exercises, websites or daily routine you will follow to improve speed and accuracy.

範例: I plan to improve my typing by practising for 20 minutes a day on a typing website to build speed and accuracy. Additionally, I will do regular accuracy drills and track my progress weekly so I can see measurable improvement.

× Well, I'm a little bit old school umm so I prefer handwriting a lot better than typing umm and therefore I can't really type very fast.

✓ Well, I'm a little bit old-school, so I prefer handwriting to typing, and I can't really type very fast.

The original sentence has several issues: 'old school' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective before a noun ('old-school') and 'prefer handwriting a lot better than typing' is ungrammatical in English; the correct pattern is 'prefer X to Y' or 'prefer X rather than Y'. The phrase 'a lot better' is redundant with 'prefer' and awkward here. Also the sentence is run-on; splitting with commas improves clarity. Suggestion: use 'prefer handwriting to typing' and break the sentence into clear clauses.

× I didn't do much practices and still insist on like write everything down.

✓ I didn't do much practice and I still insist on writing everything down.

'Did' requires the base form of the verb, but 'practices' as a noun is countable in plural here and collocates poorly after 'much'; use the uncountable noun 'practice'. Additionally, 'insist on' must be followed by a noun or gerund, so 'writing' is required rather than the bare infinitive 'write'. Also add 'I' before 'still insist' for a complete clause. Suggestion: use 'much practice' and 'insist on writing'.

× I use each so I have like a work desk desktop.

✓ I use both: I have a desktop at my work desk.

'Each' is not the correct pronoun here; the speaker means 'both' when referring to two items. The phrase 'work desk desktop' is awkward; better to say 'a desktop at my work desk' or 'a desktop at work'. Suggestion: use 'both' and reorder noun phrases for natural English.

× It's provided by my company so I use that.

✓ My company provides it, so I use it.

While the meaning is clear, passive 'It's provided by my company' followed by 'so I use that' is slightly stilted and uses the demonstrative 'that' unnecessarily. Recasting as 'My company provides it' makes the subject clear and using 'it' refers back to the desktop. Suggestion: prefer active voice for conciseness.

× At the meantime I also have my own laptop which is connected to the Internet.

✓ In the meantime I also have my own laptop, which is connected to the internet.

The idiom is 'in the meantime' not 'at the meantime'. Also 'Internet' can be written with a lowercase 'internet' in modern usage; include a comma before the non-restrictive relative clause 'which is connected to the internet'. Suggestion: use 'in the meantime' and punctuation for clarity.

× When I was in primary school, so back in the days in China, we have like computer lessons for kids to learn the basic skills, the computer skills, how to use Microsoft Office software and how to type, apparently, yeah.

✓ When I was in primary school back in the day in China, we had computer lessons for children to learn basic computer skills, such as how to use Microsoft Office and how to type.

The sentence mixes past time reference ('When I was in primary school') with present-tense 'we have'; the correct tense is past 'we had'. 'Back in the days' should be 'back in the day' or 'back then'. 'Kids' is informal; 'children' is better in this context. Also reduce filler words ('like', 'apparently, yeah') and redundant phrases ('basic skills, the computer skills'). Suggestion: use past tense throughout and cleaner phrasing.

× So I remember I learned all of my skills from that class.

✓ So I remember learning all of those skills in that class.

While 'I learned' is acceptable, using 'I remember learning' is more natural when stating a memory of acquiring skills. 'All of my skills' is too broad; 'those skills' or 'the skills' refers back to the previously mentioned computer skills. Use 'in that class' rather than 'from' for better collocation. Suggestion: prefer 'I remember learning' + 'in that class'.

× Well, there's definitely room for me to improve my speed and accuracy of typing cause currently I can't really do that.

✓ Well, there's definitely room for me to improve my typing speed and accuracy because currently I can't do that very well.

'Speed and accuracy of typing' is awkward — collocate as 'typing speed and accuracy'. 'Cause' is informal; use 'because'. 'Can't really do that' is vague; 'can't do that very well' clarifies meaning. Suggestion: reorder nouns and use 'because' for clarity.

× Umm, I think it's uh, because umm, of a lack of practice and uh, practice makes perfect.

✓ I think it's because of a lack of practice, and practice makes perfect.

The original has an extra 'it's' and a comma splice with filler 'umm'. 'It's because of a lack of practice' is fine, but the phrase should be continuous: 'I think it's because of a lack of practice.' Avoid filler sounds in written responses. Suggestion: remove fillers and keep clauses clear.

× So I will just, uh, keep practicing.

✓ So I will just keep practising.

'Keep practicing' is acceptable in American English; in British English 'practising' is the preferred spelling for the verb form. The sentence is otherwise grammatically correct. Suggestion: use British spelling 'practising' and remove filler 'uh'.