打字— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, avoid hesitations and self-corrections, and give one or two specific reasons linked with a linking word (e.g., "because" or "however"). Also correct collocations (say "handwriting" or "write by hand" and "in this day and age").

範例: I prefer writing by hand, although many people use typing in this day and age. Writing by hand helps me relax and focus because the physical motion slows me down and improves my memory.

建議: Remove fillers and be more direct. Begin with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No) and briefly explain frequency and reason. Use one linking phrase like "because" to connect reason. Mention which device specifically to answer the question fully.

範例: Yes, I type on a laptop every day because I prepare lesson materials and send emails for work. I usually use my laptop in the evenings to plan the next day's classes.

建議: Clarify the timeline and avoid irrelevant details. Start with a clear time reference (e.g., "I learned to type in third grade") and then give one concise supporting detail if relevant. Remove uncertain phrasing like "or" and unrelated information unless it explains the context.

範例: I learned to type in the third grade when our school introduced computers in class. I practiced regularly on school computers and improved throughout the year.

建議: Be specific about methods and use clear vocabulary. State whether you are currently improving or not, then give concrete examples of how you practiced (names or types of websites, exercises, frequency). Use linking words like "so" or "therefore" correctly and avoid vague acronyms without explanation.

範例: I am not actively improving my typing at the moment, but when I needed to take an online exam, I practiced on typing websites such as TypingClub and 10FastFingers for 20 minutes a day. As a result, my speed and accuracy improved.

× I think typing would be a preference for most people, especially in this time and age.

✓ I think typing would be the preferred choice for most people, especially in this day and age.

The original uses 'a preference' and 'in this time and age' which are unnatural collocations. Use 'the preferred choice' or 'preferred' and the fixed expression is 'in this day and age'. This fixes article/collocation and word choice issues and makes the sentence idiomatic.

× Day and age rather.

✓ I mean 'day and age', rather.

The short correction clarifies the speaker's self-correction. The original fragment lacks the conversational filler and correct order; adding 'I mean' makes the correction clearer and uses the correct phrase 'day and age'.

× But I personally prefer writing on hand because it makes me relax and it moves my hand.

✓ But I personally prefer handwriting because it helps me relax and moves my hand.

'Writing on hand' is incorrect; 'handwriting' or 'writing by hand' is correct. 'Makes me relax' should be 'helps me relax'. Also omit the redundant 'it' before 'moves my hand'. These changes fix incorrect collocation and verb usage.

× Apparently yes, because I'm a teacher and sometimes when I prepare my lessons or umm, send emails, I have to type on my laptop.

✓ Apparently yes, because I'm a teacher and sometimes when I prepare my lessons or send emails, I have to type on my laptop.

The original is mostly correct; remove the filler 'umm' for clarity. 'Have to' correctly expresses obligation (modal-like usage). No tense change required.

× When I was in the third grade, I first encountered a computer in my class and it was when I won or I got into the top ten in my math competition test.

✓ When I was in the third grade, I first encountered a computer in my class when I finished in the top ten in my math competition.

'Won or I got into the top ten' is disfluent and mixes verbs. Use a single clear past tense phrase: 'finished in the top ten' or 'placed in the top ten'. Also 'math competition test' is redundant — 'math competition' suffices. This corrects past tense and sentence structure.

× As of the moment, I am not too keen on my typing skills, but uh, there was a time that I had to do an online UMM test.

✓ At the moment, I am not very confident in my typing skills, but there was a time when I had to do an online UMM test.

Use 'At the moment' rather than 'As of the moment'. 'Not too keen on' is informal and slightly wrong collocation for skills; 'not very confident in' is clearer. 'There was a time that' should be 'there was a time when'. These adjustments correct tense-related phrasing and collocation.

× So I tried to improve my typing skills by using websites that UMM helps enhance this skill.

✓ So I tried to improve my typing skills by using websites that help enhance this skill.

'Websites that UMM helps' is ungrammatical and unclear. Remove 'UMM' unless it is a specific named service; if it is, rephrase as 'websites that UMM provides to help enhance this skill'. The corrected version uses a relative clause with the correct verb 'help'. This fixes pronoun/reference and sentence structure issues.