打字— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 문법과 표현을 자연스럽게 고치고 불필요한 반복을 줄이세요. 예를 들어 ‘the feels that I can feel’처럼 중복되는 표현을 피하고, 관사와 단수/복수 형태(‘pencils’)를 정확히 사용하세요. 또한 주제문을 분명히 말한 뒤 간단한 이유를 하나 더 덧붙이면 더 설득력 있어 보입니다.

範例: I prefer handwriting because I enjoy the tactile sensation of using a pencil. It helps me concentrate and remember information better.

建議: 문장 구성과 어휘 선택을 개선하세요. ‘type A keyboard’ 같은 표현은 불명확하므로 구체적으로 말하세요. 또한 반복(‘every day’가 여러 번 등장)을 줄이고 약속 관련 표현은 간단히 정리하세요. 연결어를 사용해 이유를 자연스럽게 연결하면 좋습니다.

範例: Yes, I use a laptop keyboard every day because I write blog articles with my friends. Therefore, I spend a lot of time typing each morning.

建議: 문법(관사, 시제, 주어-동사 일치)을 바로잡고 불필요한 말(‘Uh’)을 줄이세요. 장소 설명은 과거형으로 자연스럽게 연결하세요. 예를 들어 ‘when I was an elementary school student’와 ‘there was a computer room’으로 고치세요.

範例: I learned to type when I was an elementary school student because my school had a computer room where we practiced typing.

建議: ‘import’는 잘못된 동사 선택입니다. 적절한 동사(‘improve’, ‘enhance’, ‘develop’)를 사용하고, 방법을 구체적으로 제시하세요(예: 연습 프로그램, 타자 연습 사이트, 매일 반복 연습). 또한 문장은 최대 3~4개로 간결하게 유지하세요.

範例: I improve my typing by practicing daily on typing websites and using typing software. I also do timed drills to increase my speed and accuracy.

× I prefer handwriting because I like the feels that I can feel when I use the pencils.

✓ I prefer handwriting because I like the feeling I get when I use a pencil.

The noun 'feels' is incorrect here; use the singular noun 'feeling' to refer to a sensation. 'I can feel' is redundant with 'feeling I get', so remove it. Use the singular countable 'a pencil' when speaking generally about using one pencil. Suggestion: Use 'feeling' instead of 'feels' and avoid redundant verbs (e.g., 'feeling I get' not 'feels that I can feel').

× Yes, I like a type A keyboard everyday because I have to write the blog articles every day I promise with my friends. So I have to do that.

✓ Yes, I like a type A keyboard every day because I have to write blog articles every day with my friends, so I do that.

Use 'every day' as two words for the adverbial phrase meaning 'daily'. 'Write the blog articles' sounds unnatural; use 'write blog articles' (no definite article) for general activity. 'I promise with my friends' is ungrammatical and unclear; likely meant 'with my friends' as part of activity, so place it after 'every day'. The phrase 'So I have to do that' is wordy; 'so I do that' fits present habitual tense. Suggestion: Use 'every day' for frequency, remove unnecessary articles, and place clauses to clarify meaning.

× I learned how to type on a keyboard when I was a elementary school student.

✓ I learned how to type on a keyboard when I was an elementary school student.

The article 'a' before a word starting with a vowel sound should be 'an'. 'Elementary' begins with a vowel sound, so use 'an elementary school student'. Suggestion: Use 'an' before words that begin with vowel sounds.

× Uh, there are a computer room in my elementary school so I can learn in.

✓ Uh, there was a computer room in my elementary school, so I could learn there.

The subject-verb number is incorrect: 'a computer room' is singular, so use 'was' not 'are'. Use past tense 'was' to match 'learned'. Also, 'in' at the end is unnatural; use 'there' as the adverb of place. Suggestion: Match verb tense and number with the subject ('there was a computer room') and use 'there' for location.

× I can import my typing skills by practicing through my computer or laptop.

✓ I can improve my typing skills by practicing on my computer or laptop.

The verb 'import' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'improve'. Use 'practicing on my computer' rather than 'through', which better expresses using the device as the place or tool for practice. 'Typing skills' should be plural and 'improve' fits the intended meaning. Suggestion: Use the correct verb 'improve' and the preposition 'on' with devices when practicing.