打字— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: begin with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with a smooth linking phrase. Fix sentence fragments and choose more natural vocabulary (e.g., "feel touched" instead of "feel. Thankful").

範例: I prefer handwriting. It feels warmer and more personal than typing, because a handwritten note shows that someone spent time on it; for example, when I receive a handwritten card, I feel touched and appreciated.

建議: Start with a direct answer, then give clear, specific reasons using linking words. Avoid awkward phrasing like "materials are old in my laptop" — say "my study materials are stored on my laptop." Keep sentences short and accurate.

範例: I use a laptop keyboard every day. I keep most of my study materials on the laptop, so I use it to search for information and open lecture slides when I study.

建議: Good structure and clarity. Improve by making the causal link clearer and using concise language. Replace "message them" with "send messages" and avoid unnecessary words like "in order to."

範例: I learned to type in elementary school. My dad gave me my first mobile phone, so I started sending messages often, which helped me practice and improve my typing speed.

建議: Correct vocabulary and grammar ("chipping" → "typing"); use linking words to show sequence (e.g., "first," "then," "now"). Be specific about methods and results, and fix verb forms and agreement.

範例: At first I improved my typing by sending messages to my friends. Then I used a typing practice app to increase my speed; now, if a friend sends one sentence, I can reply with several sentences quickly.

× I prefer handwriting and it's because handwriting is warmer and more personal than typing and typing can be no emotions to others.

✓ I prefer handwriting because it is warmer and more personal than typing, and typing can show no emotion to others.

Run-on sentence and awkward phrasing: use 'because' to connect reason, reduce repetition of 'handwriting' and 'typing', use 'show no emotion' (verb) instead of 'can be no emotions' (noun). Also use singular 'emotion' for uncountable sense.

× For example, when I receive a handwriting card, I will feel. Thankful.

✓ For example, when I receive a handwritten card, I feel thankful.

Fragment and word choice: 'handwriting card' is incorrect; use 'handwritten card'. Remove unnecessary future 'will' when describing a general reaction, and combine sentences to avoid a sentence fragment.

× I type on the laptop keyboard every day and it's because my study materials are old in my laptop and I will use it to search the information I need and open the lecture slides in order to study.

✓ I type on my laptop keyboard every day because my study materials are on my laptop and I use it to search for the information I need and open lecture slides to study.

Articles and prepositions: use 'my laptop keyboard' and 'on my laptop'. Use 'search for' rather than 'search' when followed by an object. Remove unnecessary 'the' before 'lecture slides'. Use present simple for habitual actions instead of 'it's because' plus future 'will'.

× I learned how to type on my keyboard when I was in elementary school.

✓ I learned how to type on a keyboard when I was in elementary school.

Use 'a keyboard' rather than 'my keyboard' because the general skill of typing is not tied to a specific personal device when describing when you learned it; both are possible but 'a keyboard' is more natural here.

× At that time, my dad gave me my first cell phone in order to message them easily, and I used it to improve my typing speed.

✓ At that time, my dad gave me my first cell phone so I could message people more easily, and I used it to improve my typing speed.

Pronoun and phrasing: 'message them' is vague; use 'message people' or 'message others'. 'In order to' is wordy; 'so I could' is more natural. Also 'more easily' is the correct adverb form.

× At first I improved my chipping by messaging with my friend and I used the typing practice app to improve my typing speed and now my friend send one sentence, I can send like 5 sentences.

✓ At first I improved my typing by messaging my friend, and I used a typing practice app to increase my typing speed. Now when my friend sends one sentence, I can reply with about five sentences.

Multiple errors: 'chipping' is a typo for 'typing'. 'Messaging with my friend' should be 'messaging my friend'. Use 'a typing practice app' (article). Subject-verb agreement: 'friend send' -> 'friend sends'. Use 'reply with about five sentences' for clarity and use 'five' instead of numeral in formal text. Split long run-on into two sentences and use consistent tense.