打字— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and direct: begin with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give one or two specific reasons linked with cohesive devices. Avoid hesitations and small grammar errors (e.g. 'misleaded' → 'misled'). Use clearer vocabulary (e.g. 'convenient' and 'easier to read').

範例: I prefer typing to handwriting because typed text is easier to read and less likely to be misunderstood. For example, when I send messages from my phone, the recipient can read them immediately and there is no confusion about handwriting. Therefore, typing is more practical for everyday communication.

建議: Start with a direct topic sentence, then give concise reasons and reduce repetition. Fix grammatical issues (e.g. 'in my professional area I don't have a personal laptop' and avoid repeating words like 'there'). Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' appropriately.

範例: I usually type on a desktop because I don't have a personal laptop for work. Most of my important emails and documents are sent from my office desktop, so I use it for typing almost every day.

建議: Be specific about timing and avoid hedging words like 'most probably' or repeated 'uh'. Provide one clear timeline and a brief detail about how you learned. Improve sentence variety and grammar (e.g. 'I joined a computer course where I practiced a lot').

範例: I learned to type at school when computer science became part of the curriculum in about Year 8. Later, I also joined a short computer course where I practiced typing regularly and improved my speed and accuracy.

建議: Give a clearer, more developed answer with specific methods and sequencing using linking words (e.g. 'First... then...'). Avoid filler words. Mention measurable strategies (typing tests, practice websites, daily exercises) to sound more concrete.

範例: To improve my typing I would first use online typing tests to measure my speed and accuracy, then practice daily with timed exercises. I might also have friendly competitions with a friend to stay motivated and track improvement over time.

× Nowadays, I think I prefer typing because handwriting is something which is very personal and sometimes it is very difficult for the person, uh, to understand someone's handwriting and they might get misleaded.

✓ Nowadays, I think I prefer typing because handwriting is very personal and sometimes it is difficult for a person to understand someone else's handwriting and they might be misled.

Pronoun 'the person' is awkward; use 'a person'. 'Someone's' + 'handwriting' is fine but better as 'someone else's handwriting'. 'Misleaded' is incorrect past participle; correct form is 'misled'. Also remove unnecessary 'which is' and redundant 'the' to make sentence natural and grammatical. Suggestion: Replace vague or awkward pronouns with clear ones (a person, someone else) and use correct past participle 'misled'.

× So it's better to type and it is more convenient, uh, because everyone has mobile phones and it can be just typed and sent.

✓ So it's better to type; it is more convenient because everyone has a mobile phone and it can be typed and sent.

'Mobile phones' with 'everyone has' is plural but then 'it can be just typed' uses singular 'it' inconsistently. Use singular 'a mobile phone' or change pronoun. Also 'just' placement is awkward; move it after verb if needed. Suggest keeping consistent number and clearer word order: 'everyone has a mobile phone' and 'it can be typed and sent'.

× I usually type on desktop because in my professional UMM area I don't have a laptop which is personal UMM but I have a desktop and most of the emails and important messages are being sent from there there itself.

✓ I usually type on a desktop because in my professional area I don't have a personal laptop, but I have a desktop, and most emails and important messages are sent from there.

Missing article: use 'a desktop' not 'on desktop'. 'Personal UMM' and 'professional UMM area' are unclear; remove extra 'UMM' and use 'personal laptop' or 'personal use'. 'Are being sent' is awkward present continuous; simple present 'are sent' is better. Remove duplicate 'there' and redundant 'itself'. Suggest use articles appropriately and prefer simple present for habitual actions.

× When computer science was introduced as a subject in my school, uh, most probably at that time, uh, my computer teacher must have taught me how to type from the keyboard.

✓ When computer science was introduced as a subject at my school, my computer teacher probably taught me how to type on the keyboard.

'Must have taught' indicates deduction about a past event; the student should use 'probably taught' to indicate uncertainty about past teaching. Also use 'at my school' not 'in my school', and 'type on the keyboard' is more natural than 'type from the keyboard'. Suggest using simple past with 'probably' for uncertain recollection.

× But as far as I remember, I have joined a course of computer and there I worked hard on.

✓ But as far as I remember, I joined a computer course and worked hard there.

Mixing present perfect 'have joined' with past context and incomplete phrasal 'worked hard on' creates an awkward structure. Use simple past 'joined' and remove unnecessary 'there I' placement: 'worked hard there'. Also 'course of computer' should be 'computer course'. Suggest maintain consistent past tense when referring to past events and complete verbs with their objects if needed.

× I think having a competition is the best thing if you want to improve something.

✓ I think having competitions is the best way to improve something.

'Having a competition is the best thing' is colloquial and singular 'a competition' is less general; use plural 'competitions' or 'a competition' with 'a way'. Also 'best way to improve' is clearer than 'best thing if you want to improve'. Suggest prefer 'best way' and match noun number for general statements.

× So if I have to improve my typing, I would do a competition with my friend and maybe with that I can, uh, help myself in improving my typing skills.

✓ So if I wanted to improve my typing, I would have a competition with my friend, and that might help me improve my typing skills.

Mixing conditional forms: 'If I have to' + 'I would' is inconsistent. Use second conditional 'If I wanted... I would...' for hypothetical. 'Do a competition' is unnatural; use 'have a competition' or 'compete with'. 'Help myself in improving' is wordy; use 'help me improve'. Suggest use consistent conditional structure and natural collocations.