打字— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 질문에 대한 직접적인 응답은 있었으나 말이 중복되고 망설임(umm, I know 등)이 많아 자연스럽지 않습니다. 또한 이유가 모호하게 제시되어 구체성이 부족합니다. 구조적으로는 주제문 뒤에 명확한 이유와 짧은 예시나 결과를 한두 문장으로 이어 말하는 연습이 필요합니다. 예) 불필요한 채워말(umm 등)을 줄이고, 'because'나 'so' 같은 연결어로 이유를 명확히 제시하세요. 또한 handwriting의 어떤 점(예: 느리거나 글씨가 읽기 어렵다)을 구체적으로 설명하면 점수가 올라갑니다.

範例: I prefer typing because it's faster and neater. When I write by hand my handwriting gets messy under pressure, so typing helps me organize my thoughts more clearly.

建議: 직접적으로 질문에 답했지만 말이 끊기고 불필요한 망설임(umm)이 많습니다. 문장을 더 자연스럽게 연결하고 구체적 이유(예: 휴대성, 편리성)를 추가하세요. 또한 한두 문장으로 간결하게 말하고 'because'와 같은 연결어를 활용해 이유를 명확히 하세요.

範例: Yes, I type on a laptop every day because it's portable and convenient. Lately I've been keeping a diary on my laptop, so I use it for most of my writing tasks.

建議: 기억이 뚜렷하지 않다고 말한 것은 자연스럽지만 'umm'과 반복('I I')이 점수를 낮춥니다. 대략적인 시기(예: 초등학교 때)와 누가 가르쳤는지, 그리고 어떻게 배웠는지를 한두 문장으로 정리하세요. 연결어(when, so, because)를 사용해 흐름을 개선하세요.

範例: I don't remember the exact year, but I learned to type when I was quite young, probably in elementary school. My parents gave my brother and me a desktop computer, and my brother showed me the basics and helped me practice.

建議: 프로그램 설명은 있었지만 문장이 어색하고 중복('it's basically it's')과 망설임이 많습니다. 연습 방법을 더 구체적으로 설명하고, 어떤 점이 도움이 되었는지(예: 속도 향상, 정확도 증가)를 명확히 하세요. 또한 현재도 계속 연습하는지 여부를 밝히면 좋습니다. 문장은 2~3개로 간결하게 구성하세요.

範例: I improved my typing with a practice program that made letters fall on the screen and forced me to type them quickly. It helped me increase my speed and accuracy, and I still use similar online exercises to practice occasionally.

× I prefer typing because I know umm, I used to like handwriting but umm it umm my one of my handwriting habits was a pressure.

✓ I prefer typing because I used to like handwriting, but one of my handwriting habits was pressing too hard.

The original sentence has redundant fillers and awkward structure. 'I know' is unnecessary and interrupts meaning. 'my one of my handwriting habits was a pressure' is ungrammatical: use 'one of my handwriting habits' followed by a verb phrase 'was pressing too hard' to describe the habit. Remove fillers (umm) and duplicate words. Use singular 'one of my handwriting habits' and a clear action 'pressing too hard'.

× Yes, umm, I type. On a laptop keyboard every day, because these days I started to write diary on my laptop so.

✓ Yes, I type on a laptop keyboard every day, because these days I have started to write a diary on my laptop.

Combine fragments into one coherent sentence and remove filler 'umm'. Use present perfect 'have started' to indicate a recent change that continues to the present. Include the article 'a' before 'diary'. Place adverbs and frequency phrases correctly: 'on a laptop keyboard every day'.

× I don't remember exactly when I was UMM, but when I was very young my parents gave me and my brother a desktop and I I guess my brother taught me how to do it.

✓ I don't remember exactly when, but when I was very young my parents gave my brother and me a desktop, and I guess my brother taught me how to use it.

Remove filler and fix pronoun order: 'my brother and me' (object form). Use 'use it' instead of vague 'do it'. Keep tense consistent: 'gave' is past, 'taught' is past; 'I guess' can remain present to signal uncertainty, but better phrased as 'I guess my brother taught me'. Avoid duplicate words 'I I'.

× There was a kind of typing practice program on my computer. So it's basically it's lots of letter of full falls down and then I had to type as much as I can. I I have.

✓ There was a typing practice program on my computer. Basically, lots of letters would fall down and I had to type them as quickly as I could.

Simplify and correct 'a kind of typing practice program' to 'a typing practice program'. Replace ungrammatical phrase 'it's lots of letter of full falls down' with 'lots of letters would fall down'. Use past modal 'would' to describe repeated past action. Change 'as much as I can' to past 'as quickly as I could'. Remove extraneous 'I I have'.