打字— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar and word choice. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect words (e.g. 'hunt' should be 'handwrite').

範例: I prefer typing for work but handwriting for studying. For example, at the hospital I type clinical histories because it is faster and more legible. However, when I study, I handwrite notes because I remember information better and it helps me learn more deeply.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence and organize reasons with linking words. Correct minor grammar (e.g. 'a master's degree') and avoid repetition ('a lot of'). Give specific examples of tasks to illustrate.

範例: I use both a desktop and a laptop every day. At the hospital I use a desktop to enter medical records because it is connected to the clinical system. Meanwhile, I use my laptop at home for research, writing papers, and my master's coursework.

建議: Make the timeline clear and fix grammar and sentence structure. Use one or two concise sentences: state the age, describe how you practised, and give a specific example. Avoid run-on sentences and incorrect phrasing.

範例: I learned to type when I was about seven years old after my parents bought a computer for my sister and me. I practiced a lot by typing notes and messages to friends, and I improved further at school when we used computers for lessons.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and add one or two specific methods with linking words. Correct phrasing (e.g. 'try not to look at the keyboard', 'touch typing'). Avoid repeating 'every day' twice.

範例: I improve my typing mainly through daily practice at work and deliberate exercises. For example, I type medical records every day, and I also practice touch typing by not looking at the keyboard and doing online speed drills to increase accuracy and speed.

× It depends in the activity that I'm doing.

✓ It depends on the activity that I'm doing.

The correct preposition after 'depends' is 'on', not 'in'. Use 'depends on' to indicate what something is contingent upon. Suggestion: memorize common verb-preposition pairings (e.g., depends on).

× For example, I work in a hospital and I prefer to do the clinical histories and typing.

✓ For example, I work in a hospital and I prefer to do the clinical histories and typing.

No grammatical change needed for prepositions here; sentence is acceptable. (Included for completeness; no correction performed because it fits the provided list.)

× But for example, when I'm studying, I prefer to hunt, right?

✓ But, for example, when I'm studying, I prefer to handwrite, right?

The student used 'hunt' mistakenly instead of 'handwrite'. This is a word choice error that affects sentence meaning. Replace with 'handwrite' to match context. Ensure verb form 'prefer to handwrite' is correct structure after 'prefer to'.

× Because when you hand write, you remember things most and I think you can, you can learn more if you do the handwriting.

✓ Because when you handwrite, you remember things better and I think you can learn more if you handwrite.

Multiple issues: 'hand write' should be one verb 'handwrite' (verb form); 'most' is incorrect adverb here—use 'better'; redundant phrase 'you can, you can' should be simplified; 'do the handwriting' is awkward—use 'handwrite'. Suggestions: use single-word verbs and choose appropriate adverbs ('better').

× I type on a desktop every day because I do medical records at the hospital.

✓ I type on a desktop every day because I enter medical records at the hospital.

Verb choice 'do medical records' is unnatural; use 'enter medical records' or 'create medical records'. This isn't a tense error but a word choice; correction improves collocation. The sentence's subject-verb agreement is fine.

× Also I type on my laptop because I'm working currently on research projects and also I'm doing a master degree, so I have a lot of work and a lot of things to write.

✓ Also I type on my laptop because I'm currently working on research projects and I'm also doing a master's degree, so I have a lot of work and many things to write.

Reorder 'currently' to natural position ('I'm currently working'); 'doing a master degree' is incorrect noun form—use 'doing a master's degree'; 'a lot of things' can be improved to 'many things'. These are present-tense and noun form corrections.

× I learned when I was almost seven years, my parents gave to me and my sister a computer, so I used to spend a lot of time typing like notes or typing message to my friends and finally I and learning when I was at school.

✓ I learned when I was almost seven years old; my parents gave a computer to my sister and me, so I used to spend a lot of time typing notes or messages to my friends, and I learned more when I was at school.

Multiple past-tense and grammar errors: 'seven years' needs 'old'; word order for indirect object should be 'gave a computer to my sister and me' or 'gave my sister and me a computer'; 'typing like notes or typing message' should be 'typing notes or messages'; 'finally I and learning' is ungrammatical—correct to 'I learned more'. Use consistent past tense and correct object order.

× I write medical records every day, so I'm improving my typing every day by doing my daily routine.

✓ I write medical records every day, so I'm improving my typing through this daily routine.

Repetition 'every day' and awkward 'by doing my daily routine' can be streamlined. Move adverbial phrase to sound natural: 'through this daily routine'. Avoid unnecessary repetition.

× Also, I try to not look to the keyboard while I'm typing and that has led me to improve my skills on hand typing.

✓ Also, I try not to look at the keyboard while I'm typing, and that has helped me improve my touch-typing skills.

Use of 'to' after 'look' is incorrect; correct preposition is 'at'. 'Try not to' is more natural than 'try to not'. 'On hand typing' is inaccurate—use 'touch-typing' or 'typing by touch'. 'Has led me to improve' is wordy; 'has helped me improve' is clearer. Suggest learning common verb-preposition pairs and collocations.