打字— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변은 자연스럽지만 몇 가지 문제점이 있습니다. 우선 'As an older person'라는 표현은 불필요하거나 시험 맥락에서 어색할 수 있으니 삭제하세요. 문장이 여러 번 끊기고 중복('So. So')이 있어 유창성과 응집력이 떨어집니다. 또한 구체적인 예시(언제 손글씨를 쓰는지, 어떤 상황에서 기억에 도움이 되었는지)를 추가하면 내용이 풍부해집니다. 문장 수는 3문장 이내로 유지하고 연결어(by contrast, for example, because)를 사용해 논리를 명확히 하세요.

範例: I prefer handwriting because it helps me concentrate and remember details better. For example, when I take notes in lectures, writing by hand makes it easier for me to recall key points later. Therefore, I still choose handwriting for studying and planning.

建議: 대체로 명확하고 자연스럽습니다. 다만 두 문장을 연결할 때 연결어를 사용하면 더 논리적으로 들립니다. 'Laptop is lighter' 대신 관사(a laptop)와 복수형 또는 형용사 사용을 정확히 하고, 구체적인 상황(어떤 수업인지, 얼마나 자주 카페에 가는지)을 한 문장으로 덧붙이면 점수가 더 올라갈 것입니다.

範例: I use a laptop every day because I don't have a desktop in Canada and a laptop is much more portable. For instance, I often bring it to my English classes and to cafés when I study, which makes it very convenient.

建議: 문법과 어휘 선택에서 오류가 보입니다('a computer classes' → 'computer classes'; 'at the time I learned about introductory keyboard course' 어색). 문장을 간결하게 재구성하고 구체적인 정보를 추가하세요(몇 학년 때, 어떤 단축키를 배웠는지). 연결어(so, therefore, then)를 적절히 사용해 흐름을 개선하세요.

範例: I didn't have computer classes in primary school, so I first learned typing at university. There I took an introductory keyboard course where I learned proper finger placement and useful shortcuts like Ctrl+C and Ctrl+V.

建議: 의미 전달이 혼란스럽고 문법·어휘 오류가 많습니다('The kids practice'는 맥락상 부적절; 시제 혼용; 'speed and accuracy about my keyboard' 어색). 감정 표현('I didn't want to depressed')도 문법적으로 고쳐야 합니다. 구체적인 연습 방법(타이핑 연습 프로그램, 하루 연습 시간, 목표 WPM)을 제시하고 연결어로 문장을 정리하세요.

範例: I improved my typing by practicing every day using online typing programs. For example, I spent about 20 minutes daily on exercises to increase my speed and accuracy, and I tracked my progress to stay motivated.

× As an older person, I prefer handwriting.

✓ As an older person, I prefer handwriting.

Pronoun use is acceptable; no change needed. The sentence correctly uses 'I' to refer to the speaker. (No correction required.)

× It helps me think more about the spelling and what I am writing now.

✓ It helps me think more about spelling and about what I am writing now.

The gerund 'spelling' does not need the definite article 'the' here; adding the preposition 'about' before 'what' improves parallel structure. Suggestion: use parallel prepositional phrases for clarity.

× So. So I find the handwriting improves my focus and memory.

✓ So I find that handwriting improves my focus and memory.

The repeated 'So. So' is redundant and nonstandard. Adding 'that' after 'find' clarifies the noun clause. Suggestion: avoid redundant fillers and use 'that' to introduce clauses when needed.

× I use a laptop every day because I don't have a desktop in Canada.

✓ I use a laptop every day because I don't have a desktop in Canada.

No tense or agreement error; sentence is grammatically correct. (No correction required.)

× Laptop is lighter and more portable so I can take it to my classes and cafes.

✓ The laptop is lighter and more portable, so I can take it to my classes and cafes.

When referring to laptops in general in this context after mentioning 'a laptop', use 'the laptop' to refer back to it. Also add a comma before 'so' linking clauses. Suggestion: use definite article to refer back to a previously mentioned noun.

× I didn't have a computer classes in my primary school, so I first had the classes at university.

✓ I didn't have computer classes in my primary school, so I first took classes at university.

Use plural 'computer classes' without 'a' and use 'took classes' rather than 'had the classes' to express attending courses. Suggestion: use correct collocations for 'take a class/take classes' and remove unnecessary articles.

× So at the time I learned about introductory keyboard course such as how to use keyboard and shortcuts.

✓ So at that time I learned introductory keyboard courses, such as how to use the keyboard and shortcuts.

Use 'that time' or 'at the time', plural 'courses' to match, and include 'the' before 'keyboard'. 'Learned about' can be simplified to 'learned'. Suggestion: match singular/plural and include articles for specific nouns.

× The kids practice.

✓ The kids practiced.

Context indicates the student is describing their own practice, so this sentence is unclear and likely incorrect. If they meant 'I practiced like the kids', rewrite accordingly. Here changed to past tense to fit surrounding past-tense narrative. Suggestion: make subject and tense clear.

× I practiced every day because I wanted to speed and accuracy about my keyboard and I don't.

✓ I practiced every day because I wanted to improve my speed and accuracy with the keyboard, and I didn't want to feel depressed.

Use 'improve my speed and accuracy' (verb + noun), 'with the keyboard' for correct preposition, and 'didn't want to feel depressed' for correct negation and state. 'I don't' is incorrect in past context. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use correct collocations.

× I didn't want to depressed by myself.

✓ I didn't want to be depressed by myself.

Passive structure requires 'be' before past participle 'depressed'. However, 'depressed by myself' is odd; better is 'I didn't want to feel depressed' or 'I didn't want to make myself depressed.' Suggestion: use 'feel depressed' or 'make myself depressed' for natural expression.