视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise, reduce fillers (umm, uh), and organize into a clear topic sentence plus one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and give precise examples (e.g., types of scenes or occasions). Keep to a maximum of 4–5 sentences.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it helps me relax and remember special moments. For example, I often photograph seaside sunrises and mountain trails when I travel. These images let me relive the atmosphere later and share it with friends.

建議: Start with a clear preference statement, avoid vague comparisons and fillers, and support it with specific reasons and one brief exception. Use linking words (because, although, however) for coherence and correct plural/grammar (e.g., 'mountains make' not 'mountains makes').

範例: I prefer rural views to urban ones because mountains and natural sunsets make me feel peaceful and refreshed. However, I sometimes enjoy cityscapes at night for their energy and colourful lights.

建議: Give a direct answer first (e.g., 'I don't prefer one over the other'), then explain with specific contrasts and a brief personal preference or experience. Avoid repeating the same sentence and finish thoughts fully. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'its own beauty', 'one over the other').

範例: I don't prefer one over the other because each country offers different kinds of beauty and culture. For instance, the Maldives is striking for its clear blue water and beaches, while the United States has diverse landscapes from forests to deserts, so I enjoy them for different reasons.

× Yes, of course taking pictures makes me more happy and relaxing because I can enjoy the moment and as well as I can umm, see later on if I want to uh, relive in that one.

✓ Yes, of course taking pictures makes me happier and more relaxed because I can enjoy the moment and I can also look back later if I want to relive it.

Comparative and adjective form errors: 'more happy' and 'relaxing' are incorrect here. Use the comparative form 'happier' and the adjective 'more relaxed' to describe feeling. The phrase 'as well as I can' is awkward; use 'I can also'. 'See later on' is better as 'look back later', and 'relive in that one' should be 'relive it'. Improve by using correct comparative/adjective forms and clearer verbs.

× Mostly I take uh, pictures of umm, Seaside Mountain.

✓ Mostly I take pictures of the seaside and mountains.

The original mixes two nouns without parallel structure and miscapitalizes common nouns. Combine related items with 'and' and use lowercase for common nouns. Use plural 'mountains' if referring generally. This yields a natural, parallel list.

× Mostly I prefer the views from rural areas than the City side because mountains makes me more happy than pubs and sunsets makes me more happy than uh St. lights.

✓ Mostly I prefer views from rural areas to those in the city because mountains make me happier than pubs, and sunsets make me happier than streetlights.

Use 'prefer ... to' not 'prefer ... than'. Subject-verb agreement: 'mountains makes' and 'sunsets makes' should be 'mountains make' and 'sunsets make'. Use 'happier' not 'more happy'. 'City' and 'St. lights' are incorrectly capitalized or abbreviated; use 'city' and 'streetlights'. Also replace 'those in the city' for clarity.

× That's why I like umm more rural areas, but sometimes I prefer uh going out in cities.

✓ That's why I like rural areas more, but sometimes I prefer going out in cities.

Word order: place 'more' after the object ('rural areas more'). The gerund phrase 'prefer going out in cities' is acceptable; remove filler words. This makes the sentence clearer and grammatically natural.

× Generally speaking, every country has their own beauty.

✓ Generally speaking, every country has its own beauty.

'Every country' is singular, so use the singular possessive pronoun 'its' rather than plural 'their' to agree in number.

× The beauty from Maldives is different from the beauty of America.

✓ The beauty of the Maldives is different from the beauty of America.

Proper noun form: use the definite article 'the' with 'Maldives' ('the Maldives'). Use 'the beauty of' for both places to be parallel.

× Every country has their own beauty, their own culture and their own perspective.

✓ Every country has its own beauty, its own culture and its own perspective.

Same singular-plural agreement: 'every country' is singular, so use 'its' for each possessive pronoun to agree in number.

× I don't prefer one over other.

✓ I don't prefer one over the other.

Missing article 'the' before 'other' when comparing two items. Use 'the other' to indicate the alternative specifically.

× From my point of view, I like to live in.

✓ From my point of view, I like to live here.

Sentence is incomplete and lacks an object after 'live in'. If the speaker means their own country or current place, use 'here' or specify the place (for example, 'my country'). Ensure the verb 'live' has a clear complement.